Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Just some thoughts

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God, can you hear me?

It’s Aaron… I need your help.

Please rescue my soul.

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read more



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This is so beautifully written. It's heart-touching and has a great connectivity as well. It's something we all feel now and then. But to put it so expressively and beautifully into words! Hats off!

Please rescue my soul.
I loved this line. By putting ''soul'' there you gave such a lovely and deep meaning to the senryu. You've done a great job! :)



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Bushra... I had actually written this piece with a different last line... had it.. read more
Bushra Naqshbandi

9 Years Ago

You're most welcome! :)
WOW!!!!

This one was fantastic as well..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Nikki :) Appreciate the review
♥ Ari Skye ♥

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome.. Anytime, my friend.. :)
Fantastic my friend,
you said it, he heard it and know
you must believe he will do it!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
God is good!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you James... I just said in another response I can remember myself as a child doing the same t.. read more
Definitely how I feel right now, eventually we'll get our answer. (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yes we will :) It reminds me of when I was a child praying and asking if He can hear me. Here I am.. read more
a cry a cry from a citizen of earth

in reply ;) XX

saving yourself can
only be accomplished by
knowing you are god

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you KWP... that is an awesome reply :) Appreciate the review very much
Few words cutting straight to the point. Tell me... Is this the usual structure for this type of poetry? cause i'd like to try it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yes a Senryu is a 17 syllable poem typically 5, 7, 5 syllables. I hadn't tried it until I saw some .. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

9 Years Ago

Yeah, you did. Thanks, i'll try it out some time.
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Do it and let me know :)

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Added on May 4, 2015
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Tags: senryu, faith, soul

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