Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Just some thoughts

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God, can you hear me?

It’s Aaron… I need your help.

Please rescue my soul.

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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AaronFreitas
Please review... appreciate it :)

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I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read more



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I think he already has Aaron, it was done in the asking. I really, really like this. This is more of an English style senryu than traditional. It has extra pauses and such, but it is beautiful in its simplicity.
Jan

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yes I will definitely check it out :) Hey didn't you have a write that you said you wanted to turn .. read more
JayceeC

9 Years Ago

Yes it's here The Kid Named Not ME!
I'll move another one or two here and send you read reque.. read more
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Sweet... my oldest daughter is 10 she just wrote a story so I wanted to show her yours :)
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Can you add my name there lol ...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Lol thats the beauty.... take my name and add yours and it's as personal as it gets :) Thanks for y.. read more
B

9 Years Ago

You write alot of beautiful pieces ....
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Aww thanks... so do you :)
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God is inside of you, Aaron. The "I" in I am :) quite sure you were heard

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Lynn... I am sure He heard as well... He always does :) Appreciate your review my friend
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This is beautiful. (:

- Brittney

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Brittney... with my poems I try to find the perfect font that fits the emotion.... read more
613

9 Years Ago

It fits well. Nice work!
I like that you are asking God publicly for His help.
This shows the strength of your relationship with Him that you can be anywhere and feel comfortable enough to speak speak with Him.
That your Church is anywhere that you need it to be!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Perkele really wanted my faith to shine through... it's not a secret. I like that "your c.. read more
short, simple, effective. I think them words say it all. You show your beliefs in only 3 lines and 15 words which some times is very hard to do.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you ANONYMOUS appreciate your kind words and review my friend :)
the fact that you believe that God is there is the biggest:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend... yes that part is in there loud and clear :)
A very cute little piece of senryu, Aaron, it conveys the emotions beautifully! There's uncertainity, reliance, and faith all depicted.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Rana.... I tried to get the emotions across and hopefully I did that well in thi.. read more
Interesting cry for help Aaron, I think you may be reflecting many people these days, certainly me :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I was hoping many could relate to this piece... short and simple but a lot of meaning behind those w.. read more
A senyru I might have written once or twice myself Aaron. Love the way it flows as an informal conversation and yet fits the form. Hope tis but poetry though?

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much John... appreciate the review buddy... it still feels like it's my style when I .. read more

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Added on May 4, 2015
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