I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.
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9 Years Ago
I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read moreI mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and getting a whooping. Thanks for your review Pixieblue :)
I do this prayer daily. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem and prayer.
Coyote
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9 Years Ago
Thank you Coyote... I think sometimes we ask if He is listening and we know He is... still we ask th.. read moreThank you Coyote... I think sometimes we ask if He is listening and we know He is... still we ask the question. Appreciate your review buddy :)
9 Years Ago
I believe he is listening. I believe he can't grasp the hate held by men and you are welcome.
I'm not religious but it still feels very powerful, especially the last line.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you Daisygirl... appreciate your kind words :) Oh... and appreciate all the reviews you have .. read moreThank you Daisygirl... appreciate your kind words :) Oh... and appreciate all the reviews you have done... I appreciate you very much!
I'm not religious, but I was raised in a Catholic household and went to Catholic schools, so I'm familiar with religious writing. I admire how direct this is when compared to most, it cuts through a lot of the pomp. Great write, Aaron!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Tom... was also raised Catholic and wouldn't say I'm Catholic anymore but still .. read moreThank you very much Tom... was also raised Catholic and wouldn't say I'm Catholic anymore but still have my strong faith :) Appreciate the review buddy
I love to write Haiku, this just reminded me about the wonderful Senryu style!
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9 Years Ago
I just started with this style... one of my friends on here writes some amazing Senryu's and it kind.. read moreI just started with this style... one of my friends on here writes some amazing Senryu's and it kind of made me want to give it a try... send me some read requests I'd love to check out your Haikus :) Thanks for the review
the lord said all flesh will cry out in the last day`s
i know how you feel,great write
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much brother... sometimes it's good to put it out there for everyone to hear my quest.. read moreThank you very much brother... sometimes it's good to put it out there for everyone to hear my questions also :) Appreciate your review
Thank you Willard.... it's a fun style... not the easiest to put a good write but it takes a great t.. read moreThank you Willard.... it's a fun style... not the easiest to put a good write but it takes a great thought. Appreciate the review buddy :)
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I did one this morning but JC pointed out I covered both styles in one, so I re wrote. Don't know if.. read moreI did one this morning but JC pointed out I covered both styles in one, so I re wrote. Don't know if I got it right or not. You are the inspiration. Your intellect seems to have latched onto this style and your doing great. Thanks for sharing and giving me inspiration
to at least attempt it.
9 Years Ago
Thank you... send me read requests I'd love to check it out :)
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..