Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Just some thoughts

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God, can you hear me?

It’s Aaron… I need your help.

Please rescue my soul.

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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AaronFreitas
Please review... appreciate it :)

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I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read more



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I do this prayer daily. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem and prayer.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote... I think sometimes we ask if He is listening and we know He is... still we ask th.. read more
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

I believe he is listening. I believe he can't grasp the hate held by men and you are welcome.
I'm not religious but it still feels very powerful, especially the last line.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Daisygirl... appreciate your kind words :) Oh... and appreciate all the reviews you have .. read more
Daisygirl

9 Years Ago

No problem, I love reading poems.
It's already saved my dude!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thanks buddy :) Appreciate the review... I sure am hoping it is :)
I'm not religious, but I was raised in a Catholic household and went to Catholic schools, so I'm familiar with religious writing. I admire how direct this is when compared to most, it cuts through a lot of the pomp. Great write, Aaron!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Tom... was also raised Catholic and wouldn't say I'm Catholic anymore but still .. read more
Lovely! I like this one, its to the point.

I love to write Haiku, this just reminded me about the wonderful Senryu style!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I just started with this style... one of my friends on here writes some amazing Senryu's and it kind.. read more
. .and shall he answer your prayer in pysalm. ..Lol: -)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Maybe... haha any way He answers is good :) Appreciate the comment my friend :)
TheOne&Only

9 Years Ago

haha your welcome :)
the lord said all flesh will cry out in the last day`s
i know how you feel,great write

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much brother... sometimes it's good to put it out there for everyone to hear my quest.. read more
 wordman

9 Years Ago

yeah,i do the same
you are good at senryus...beautiful!!
Maumil

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Maumil... I appreciate the review... and appreciate your kind words :)
well im far from religious,hence i'm atheist ,but nice job anyway arron

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you my friend... appreciate the review :)
cloakedone

9 Years Ago

hope so aaron
Aaron you have done it again. I still have to try it. Nicely done my man. Thanks for sharing. Love the msg.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Willard.... it's a fun style... not the easiest to put a good write but it takes a great t.. read more
Willard Wells

9 Years Ago

I did one this morning but JC pointed out I covered both styles in one, so I re wrote. Don't know if.. read more
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you... send me read requests I'd love to check it out :)

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Added on May 4, 2015
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Tags: senryu, faith, soul

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