Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

Rescue my Soul (Senryu)

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Just some thoughts

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God, can you hear me?

It’s Aaron… I need your help.

Please rescue my soul.

 

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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AaronFreitas
Please review... appreciate it :)

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I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read more



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Short, but good. I enjoyed the quick read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Ilerah... appreciate your comments.
It lack some meaning in this poem. Although you have kept in senryu style. Don't get me wrong but you still tried and I will give you points for that

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you Terrance
As a very religious person this is beautiful! its so simple but vulnerable and open.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend :) Appreciate your review
Short and beautifully expressed :') Amazing work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Nabeeha :) Appreciate your review... send me any requests you want read :)
Short, simple, sad and stunning!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Nice... the 4 S's that I was going for :) Appreciate your review Madhu :)
Powerful and honest words my friend.

:) Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Julie :) Appreciate your review
Know this feeling so well.......sometimes it seems as my words bounce off the ceiling, back to my desperate mouth.

WIthin those apparent silences, we tend to hear him best eventually.....:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Yeah I hear ya... sometimes it feels like that... then we ask "God... can you hear me?" Glad you kn.. read more
SleeplessVolcano

9 Years Ago

The best analogy I heard recently was that we are like TV sets, requiring to be tuned in properly. .. read more
Aaron: I love it! I'm leaving a lot to the featured review. It did touch my heart and the prayer sounded more like a plea....Rescue my Soul...Beautiful title and just lovely writing. You surprised me! Great work. Everyone can relate Aaron; hope more people read it. Sometimes we or I feel like God guide me, am I wasting my life...searching for a change. Wonderful Senryu! Thank you so much. Dale

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Dale! Appreciate the review. This one here is my second Senryu... I kind of li.. read more
Confuser

9 Years Ago

Buddy, I loved it & you're welcome!
Aww....I'll help God rescue you, friend! Why do you think you need to be rescued? What have you done, or what has happened to you to make you think your soul is damned to hell? Great write, but very sad. Thanks for sharing, friend. You have a gift!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Hmm so many questions... I couldn't fit all that in a Senryu lol... thanks for the review friend :)
When we feel the soul is need of rescue, the dam has broken and we can only call it back, poignant hon ...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Poppy :) appreciate your review my friend

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Added on May 4, 2015
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Tags: senryu, faith, soul

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