I hear this, when i close my eyes and listen i can hear a small and scared and feeble voice, tattered and worn just pleading, almost begging for some mercy.
It makes your heart sink.
It also reminds me of a child, unaware and untainted having their first lesson in life but that somehow is a darker picture than the first.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
I mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and gettin.. read moreI mentioned in a comment this write took me back to my childhood... laying in bed praying and getting a whooping. Thanks for your review Pixieblue :)
Know this feeling so well.......sometimes it seems as my words bounce off the ceiling, back to my desperate mouth.
WIthin those apparent silences, we tend to hear him best eventually.....:)
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Yeah I hear ya... sometimes it feels like that... then we ask "God... can you hear me?" Glad you kn.. read moreYeah I hear ya... sometimes it feels like that... then we ask "God... can you hear me?" Glad you know this feeling... appreciate your review my friend :)
9 Years Ago
The best analogy I heard recently was that we are like TV sets, requiring to be tuned in properly. .. read moreThe best analogy I heard recently was that we are like TV sets, requiring to be tuned in properly. The correct signals are always there......there is no fault with the signal, the "repair" work lies with the TV.....:)
Aaron: I love it! I'm leaving a lot to the featured review. It did touch my heart and the prayer sounded more like a plea....Rescue my Soul...Beautiful title and just lovely writing. You surprised me! Great work. Everyone can relate Aaron; hope more people read it. Sometimes we or I feel like God guide me, am I wasting my life...searching for a change. Wonderful Senryu! Thank you so much. Dale
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Dale! Appreciate the review. This one here is my second Senryu... I kind of li.. read moreThank you very much Dale! Appreciate the review. This one here is my second Senryu... I kind of like the format. It isn't as easy as being able to write out everything you feel and the challenge is to still create the connection to the words. 17 syllables is easy... but finding a way to connect with the reader is the fun and challenging part. Thank you buddy :)
Aww....I'll help God rescue you, friend! Why do you think you need to be rescued? What have you done, or what has happened to you to make you think your soul is damned to hell? Great write, but very sad. Thanks for sharing, friend. You have a gift!
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Hmm so many questions... I couldn't fit all that in a Senryu lol... thanks for the review friend :)
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..