Hmmm... As for the poem, i think its very well done. As for the meaning...now i'm speaking, based on personal experience... Well, i'd only write poems like this, if my relationship with someone i love would break. When someone i love...or to pick up the poem's atmosphere a little better, someone i used to love shatters my heart. Anyhow, you did great.
This is wonderful. I love the format and the rhyme scheme you developed. I'm sorry that you've had to go through this, but it makes for a magnificent poem. It makes me feel bad though. It makes me think back to all my relationships, and even friendships, and question whether I made anyone feel like this before...I really hope not :( Thank you for sharing though, this is a great piece. I'm always here if you need anything!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much River :) Things happen... all we can do is grow and press on.
wow, intense and raw....absolutely wonderful poem my friend, i love it and oh how can we not relate....lovely
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9 Years Ago
Thanks very much Ana :) I ordered that tea from Moldova... I think it helped :) Haha jk this poem .. read moreThanks very much Ana :) I ordered that tea from Moldova... I think it helped :) Haha jk this poem is one of those that just came out and flowed well.. little dark but I guess thats my style.
9 Years Ago
I love this style, more of this please :) And yep, i knew you would order it :D
I love that you said to just let it flow because that is how I read it and I really felt it. Maybe because we have similar stories to this effect, but this is wonderful to me. Stanza three is my favorite. Honestly I feel this. It basically is my thought process incarnate for the last two weeks.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Aww thanks J.A. I really appreciate your review :) I thought it might hit home for you too.
Well I can say this is easy to relate to. It's amazing how things can be so fogged up when the truth is right in-front of us, and then the afterwards when clarity is shown... Well the feeling can be closer to just despair. I can say that we believe in what we want to until doubt is planted, and sadly sometimes it never is until it's too late. Makes it all the much more painful. Good work though, I like how you end with an awareness of what happened. Not complete longing, but with realization. After all once we realize what's happened, we get the chance to move on.
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9 Years Ago
I agree my friend... sometimes it's hard to see things when you are living it. It's easier to see wh.. read moreI agree my friend... sometimes it's hard to see things when you are living it. It's easier to see when on the outside looking in... but we get so caught up we can't see the truth. Thanks for the review buddy!
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..