Hmmm... As for the poem, i think its very well done. As for the meaning...now i'm speaking, based on personal experience... Well, i'd only write poems like this, if my relationship with someone i love would break. When someone i love...or to pick up the poem's atmosphere a little better, someone i used to love shatters my heart. Anyhow, you did great.
I really liked this a lot! The truth really can kill at times. Sometimes it is hard to listen to. Very emotional piece
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9 Years Ago
Thank you Brielle... I like the emotion filled writes as a reader so when I write I try be bring emo.. read moreThank you Brielle... I like the emotion filled writes as a reader so when I write I try be bring emotion, honesty and feelings that others will relate to. Most the time it's just mini pieces from my life... but it's not always that dark :) Appreciate your review
Nice rhyme scheme here, easy to read. Thank GOD you can spell correctly. bless
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9 Years Ago
lmao... I understand what you mean with spelling correctly lol... appreciate the review new friend :.. read morelmao... I understand what you mean with spelling correctly lol... appreciate the review new friend :)
This is amazing! Incredible perfection put into simple words!
I honestly admire your writing!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you KyRae :)... you made my day with your comments! I appreciate it very much... gives a purp.. read moreThank you KyRae :)... you made my day with your comments! I appreciate it very much... gives a purpose when you know someone out there connects with my thoughts and likes it :)
9 Years Ago
Anytime. Always here to read and comment, as I've told many others as well.
It's nice to kno.. read moreAnytime. Always here to read and comment, as I've told many others as well.
It's nice to know that I make your day. Knowing that, makes my day!
Very nice Aaron :) I like the no punctuation, it had a good flow without it. Some poignant emotions that come out of a break up and betrayal. I really enjoyed it, I'll have to read more of your writings
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Shawna... appreciate your review very much and would love for you to read more :.. read moreThank you very much Shawna... appreciate your review very much and would love for you to read more :) Send me read requests on anything you'd like me to read :)
the flow and structure of this poem is very nice Aaron! you can feel it moving through stages of emotions. Great job!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Emily... I think I got lucky it worked that way as far as working through the st.. read moreThank you very much Emily... I think I got lucky it worked that way as far as working through the stages of emotions :)
Sometimes the best writes come flying out with no time to pause... that's how this piece feels to me; a blur of emotional lines describing being undone by the one you thought was the one. A good write, Aaron!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much LT! I appreciate your review my friend. Thanks!
This flowed extremely well! A lot of people don't know how to rhyme & have their words come across as fluid - like both the rhyming & the timing of the words go together. You were flawless with that.
As for the actual content of the poem, very sad! But written with skill.
- Brittney
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Brittney :) Appreciate your kind words.... much appreciated!
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..