Nightmare

Written for RiverRei's nightmare contest :)

She said she loved me…                                    

So why am I tied naked to this bed?

A gag in my mouth keeping me quiet,

Handcuffs are holding me in place.

The room is dark,

Lit by just a black light.

My heart's beating rapidly…

I’m anxious for what’s to come.

She struts through the doorway,

Damn she is so sexy!

This must be some kind of sex game…

Oh count me in!

Then I see a shiny dagger in her hand,

She drags it slowly across her tongue…

Her sexy voice whispers in my ear,

“Tell me you want it Papi!”

Slowly, she zigzags the knife down my chest,

Calmly, romantically kissing on my neck….

Then just like that…

A slit across my chest!

I scream in pain but my cries are silent to her,

She speaks no words, just stares with an evil smirk…

She cuts me again, and again just to see me bleed…

The blood drips from her lips…

She chuckles, then with her hands,

Takes hold of my manhood….

She grabs the dagger as I scream and plead!!!

I’m desperate for air… I roll over…

Grabbing my pillow desperately,

Covered in sweat and barely breathing…

Damn these evil nightmares….

Hard to decipher evil from reality.

 

Reviews

[KWP]

Yowwwsssssaaaaa well thats not the kind of dream any man would want eh?

that moment - that few milliseconds - that snatch of breath when we just can't remember what reality we have chosen to reside - yeah I want to find that gap right there and explore between the dreams ...

your painted imagery was right on pace here my friend - well done (nice pic too) XX

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much KWP. I mentioned this before... if I had this dream I would just bathe in holy water for a week! lol thanks for the review :)

[Emily]

Wow, took so many unexpected turns!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :)

[Deepika]

Haha..enjoyed it;) A bit spooky but a clever idea to keep reader hooked! Nice work Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :) Had to entertain the reader... tried to bring a smirk and an "OH NO" thought to the read.

[nazia]

Creepy.. But I like it.. What a nightmare. Well written Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Nazia :) It is definitely creepy.... especially to any guy that reads it haha

[Bonaventure Onuabuchi]

Such are dreams at times; coming in a terrible and scary way! But the confusion just as in yours is when it happens to be from someone so dear to us in real life; I should say you disown the image and go on with reality.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Bonaventure :) It's good to see your face back on here my friend :)

[Matching Socks]

Yikes., totally creepy good.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ana :) Cool new pic

[Emily]

Wow. I don't know what to say after reading that!
But I loved it!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha thank you my friend :) I tried to get creative for this piece.

[W R Stowe]

Wow tell me you aren't really having these kind of nightmares ouch!Nice job you sinister writer you.You kept the interest to the very end amazingly clever

Bill

[AaronFreitas]

Haha this one was made up... like I mentioned in another comment if I had this nightmare I'd be bathing in Holy water! Thanks for the review my friend :)

[W R Stowe]

That makes me feel good maybe I should manufacture another dark tale or two your welcome Aaron

Bill

[Tori]

See at first I was getting a picture of maybe some one in a relationship with much pain and much love, the kind of relationships you can't bring your self to leave, then I got caught of guard about having the nightmares! I was definitely absorbed in your writing, love this honestly.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :) When writing it I wanted to try to make the writer think.. not really know whats coming. Hopefully I was able to do that. Plus, I found that awesome picture that fits perfect with the poem. Thanks Tori

[Tori]

No problem:) you definitely accomplished your goal:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Tori :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Holly Molly...that was 50 shades of Game of Thrones! LOL I was at the edge of my seat with this, my heart pulsating rapidly in anxiety, hoping you would be redeemed of this evil succubus. Fortunately this is just a nightmare! But I feel your pain, they do feel very real. I also tend to wake up in sweat and I am afraid of going back to sleep to be haunted again.

[AaronFreitas]

Haha thank you my friend... I still have Game of Thrones lined up on my netflix to watch... and I haven't seen 50 Shades of Grey yet... both on the to do list :) Thanks for the review my friend :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

YOU MUST WATCH!!!! eeeeh dunno about 50 shades of grey.

[AaronFreitas]

I got my Netflix and Internet all set up so I will watch it :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

woooo :D enjoy!

[wordman]

a exciting and creative write my friend,i could feel the whole thing

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Wordman! I had a good time writing this one... it was fun :)

[wordman]

you are welcome,that picture reminded me of well I better not say those Canadian girls can get real mad lol

[AaronFreitas]

lmao nice!