Today me and my daughters narrowly avoided a 6 car pileup in the rain... it was as if time stopped so we could be spared.
When
I prayed last night, I asked you to keep us safe; Protect my family, especially, my beautiful
daughters. Today, you reached down and kept us out of harm's
way; Kept us alive by missing that accident-- proof
of Faith.
I thank you, and my daughters thank you. I made sure they understood exactly who
protected us. I asked them each to pray and thank you
personally As we drove away from the pileup, shaken
emotionally.
Faith is confidence in what we hope for; Faith is belief in what we do not see. You proved that today, Lord, by saving my
family, so I'll take this opportunity to share my faith
through poetry.
I take it this is autobiographical too. Thank God you all got away untouched. I guess prayers are never prayed in vain. Br safe all of you. This is really an emotional piece. An eye-opener too, that God really exists.
Small correction- Second stanza, is there an apostrophe required,shouldn't it be "Daughters"? And in the second last line of the last stanza, a comma after "Lord" would make it more effective.
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9 Years Ago
Yeah I didn't think there should be an apostrophe but Word insisted on changing it so I left it :) .. read moreYeah I didn't think there should be an apostrophe but Word insisted on changing it so I left it :) I will fix those mistakes... thanks for the review my friend I appreciate your comments and corrections :)
Wow you and your family are very lucky cos it all happens in a split second and then your lives could be altered forever. life is short and fragile my friend
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9 Years Ago
Yes indeed it is short... you just never know how short until it's gone. Thanks for the review my f.. read moreYes indeed it is short... you just never know how short until it's gone. Thanks for the review my friend :)
He often show us His grace in different ways and we need to have faith to see it. Glad to know you're all safe and sound. Thank you for sharing your experience.
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Gabrielle :) I appreciate your comments my friend :)
Your writing really knows how to play with the heartstrings... live long and prosper :) I love your poetry; you just have a way with words and poetic rhythms that really hits home, be it sad or happy. I'd love to get some tips on how you do it!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you very much Chris! I'm not sure... I just kind of write and what comes out comes out... I t.. read moreThank you very much Chris! I'm not sure... I just kind of write and what comes out comes out... I try to put a lot of passion behind be it a fun write, a serious write or an emotional write. I usually can't write to write, I write when I feel something :) Thanks for the review my friend
9 Years Ago
No problem! And thanks for letting me pick your mind a bit hahaha Thanks again! :)
Oh my gosh! I'm so glad he reached down and protected you and your girls!!
He is a beautiful and wonderful God!!
This piece was equally as beautiful! Great Job Aaron. I'm glad you & the babies are ok, my friend!
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Thank you Nikki! It was pretty scary... my daughter was taking pics of the freeway and how bad it w.. read moreThank you Nikki! It was pretty scary... my daughter was taking pics of the freeway and how bad it was right before the accidents... didn't realize it was a pileup til we drove around it. We got lucky... well can't say lucky... God was looking after us :)
WOW, Aaron! I am sorry that happened and thank goodness you and your sweet cherubs are alright and you avoided it. Definitely Lord works in mysterious, but miraculous ways. He is very compassionate with us, we just tend to take that for granted most of the time or not pay heed (thinking it's just a coincidence, just luck, etc).
I did find a few errors. Hehehe.
Stanza one, line three: it should be "harm's"
Stanza two, line one: it should be "daughters"
That's it!
Thank you very much my friend... I appreciate your corrections... I should have paid better attentio.. read moreThank you very much my friend... I appreciate your corrections... I should have paid better attention. I finally got internet today at my house so I can take my time and write and review my work better :) Thanks my friend.... You already know I appreciate you and your comments :)
9 Years Ago
Hehe it's ok, that is why there's us for noticing these things ;).
9 Years Ago
Very true... I am not as lazy as I used to be when I first started... now I care more haha... that's.. read moreVery true... I am not as lazy as I used to be when I first started... now I care more haha... that's probably why you don't write when you are still shaken up and post... take time and perfect the poem :)
I love to write, most my work tends to be on the darker side. I write from my heart and tend not to mess with it too much. I guess sometimes I write and post without focusing on what everyone else w.. more..