Was it a dream?

Was it a dream?

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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A dream/nightmare I had the other night.... decided to write about it.

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I reach for help, no one is there

I try to breathe, gasping for air

Suffocate me, can’t take my soul

Desecrate me, a spirits toll

Try to escape, but I just fall

To my scarred knees, I plod and crawl

Still cannot breathe, frantic for air

Can’t pull away, Lord hear my prayer

Hands cover mouth, death seems so near

Open my eyes, grab rest my fears

For I am awake, twas just a dream

Demons can’t take, my soul from me

© 2015 AaronFreitas


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Loved this. My favourite lines were "Hands cover mouth, death seems so near
Open my eyes, grab rest my fears
For I am awake, twas just a dream"
Personally, i think this imagery was fantastic. You really made me and almost feel what was happening. Very fluid with movement and keeps a nice pace. :^) Thanks for the great read, Aaron!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

8 Years Ago

haha no lie when I read your favorite lines I was like did I write that or did she add that lol... i.. read more



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A type of dream I am all to familiar with. In future when trying to describe it I shall use this piece as my reference. Im a sucker for some good rhyme and rythmn and this has both in abundance. Real captured the panic excellently! I applaud you!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend!!! It wasn't easy finding all the right words to make it what I wanted.. read more
Must have been one scary dream. That is why we are taught to check under our beds for hidden nightmares before going to sleep. Lol. I used to even say a special little prayer to keep nightmares at bay. My dreams are always quite vivid too..
I really like this narration, it's power packed and reminiscent of The Rime of the Ancient Mariner in a way.
Demons cannot take a pure soul--what a wonderful message you've chosen to impart, Aaron!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend.... it was one of many scary dreams. Seems I've been having quite a f.. read more
hmm....some dream my friend :) often had one of those .....a shaking experience....
well written Aaron :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Ana :) They are not the funnest dreams to wake up to.... thats when it's good t.. read more
The battle between good and evil filters through, even in dreams. However, a soul bathed in faith cannot be taken, as much as those demons can torture our minds. And, isn't it just like God, to wait until the last minute to jump in and save us? Epic battle, my friend, and epic poem. Well-done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much FT.... I like what you said with a soul bathed in faith cannot be taken... so ve.. read more
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9 Years Ago

You are welcome, Aaron. Happy Easter my friend.... it is a good day :)
Oh Wow.. What a piece.. I have had these dreams and sometimes, they are incapacitating..
They say it's your conscious going into overdrive..

You described it quite well, my friend!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

♥ Ari Skye ♥

9 Years Ago

That's a bit fucked up.. lol
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

A little lol
♥ Ari Skye ♥

9 Years Ago

Lol. It is... just be glad you don't have what I have... That's a messed up thing
A spine-chilling nightmare. Spooky! Very well written Aaron(y)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Deepika!!! I appreciate your comments my friend :)
i love the last part..."my soul for me". Great piece!


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love the last part..."my soul for me". Great piece!


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much my friend :)
This is beautiful and sad. I really enjoyed this

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much Shadow Poet... I am glad you enjoyed this my friend :)
This is one dream Im glad I didnt get. Its a sheet soaker. God knows how you were probably flailing about like a madman in the bed acting this one out - it sounds like a PTSD type of nightmare Aaron. Truly one that you won't forget in a hurry.
So well... actually ..too well described but thank God you woke in time - d'ya ever hear that supersitition about actually dying if you die in a dream - or is that Freddy Kruger Im thinking of.
Good write mate !
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ANTO

9 Years Ago

Vivid colour dreams are a sign of intelligence Aaron. Caffiene after five kind of cancels that out l.. read more
AaronFreitas

9 Years Ago

Happy Easter my brother.... hope you have a good one!
ANTO

9 Years Ago

And you and your lovely girls Aaron - enjoy !!

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