Was it a dream?

A dream/nightmare I had the other night.... decided to write about it.

I reach for help, no one is there

I try to breathe, gasping for air

Suffocate me, can’t take my soul

Desecrate me, a spirits toll

Try to escape, but I just fall

To my scarred knees, I plod and crawl

Still cannot breathe, frantic for air

Can’t pull away, Lord hear my prayer

Hands cover mouth, death seems so near

Open my eyes, grab rest my fears

For I am awake, twas just a dream

Demons can’t take, my soul from me

Author's Note

:)

Reviews

[Cherub]

Loved this. My favourite lines were "Hands cover mouth, death seems so near
Open my eyes, grab rest my fears
For I am awake, twas just a dream"
Personally, i think this imagery was fantastic. You really made me and almost feel what was happening. Very fluid with movement and keeps a nice pace. :^) Thanks for the great read, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

haha no lie when I read your favorite lines I was like did I write that or did she add that lol... it's been a while since I've read this and it was nice to go back to the mind set I was in. It's been forever since I've written so thanks for your review my friend :)

[EileenMarie]

Very powerful & gripping to the reader! Great write!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Eileen... I hate when i have nightmares... I had to wake up and share this one as detailed as I could be :) Thanks for your review I appreciate it very much :)

[SCRIBBLER]

You have blown me away. I have lots to say but maybe this will shorten what I am feeling. A hero can go anywhere, challenge anyone, as long as he has the nerve- RICK RIORDAN. You are a hero of this website. Keep entertaining us my friend.

~Scribble On

[AaronFreitas]

Thats an awesome review my friend! I appreciate your kind words my friend!!!

[W R Stowe]

I always say the worse any one can do is take your life but they can't touch our eternal soul

Bill

[AaronFreitas]

Very true Bill... thank you for the review my friend

[Haley Wilson]

Favorited! I love the way you rhyme and it sounds so fluid and effortless, that's definitely a problem area for me haha.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Haley :) I appreciate your kind words.... rhyming is fun to me and you do see it a lot in my writings.

[BroodingOne]

Wow, very vivid. This must a terrifying nightmare indeed.

[AaronFreitas]

Yes it was... thank you my friend for your review :)

[Lubna]

It sure looked scary, because your writing has the ability to express what you feel. Good write.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Lubna :) I appreciate your kind words my friend

[Zac]

Very good write
Hope to read more in the future
I liked this very much

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much KingKlutz!

[SheIsMe]

Very vivid and realistic. I was holding my breath as I would if I dreamt the same thing. Love the descriptive words. Keep it up!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :) I appreciate you taking the time to review this poem

[Galaxy Gray]

Very creative.
I could feel the fear and strength in your poem.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Galaxy Gray! I appreciate your review :)

[Ruth]

Nightmares - ahh, know them well, dreams are interesting things to dissect or analyse...always good to write them away instead of keeping them in and feeling surreal all day :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for the review my friend :) Yes... definitely better to get it all out and just kind of let it go instead of thinking of it over and over.