Was it a dream?

A dream/nightmare I had the other night.... decided to write about it.

I reach for help, no one is there

I try to breathe, gasping for air

Suffocate me, can’t take my soul

Desecrate me, a spirits toll

Try to escape, but I just fall

To my scarred knees, I plod and crawl

Still cannot breathe, frantic for air

Can’t pull away, Lord hear my prayer

Hands cover mouth, death seems so near

Open my eyes, grab rest my fears

For I am awake, twas just a dream

Demons can’t take, my soul from me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Cherub]

Loved this. My favourite lines were "Hands cover mouth, death seems so near
Open my eyes, grab rest my fears
For I am awake, twas just a dream"
Personally, i think this imagery was fantastic. You really made me and almost feel what was happening. Very fluid with movement and keeps a nice pace. :^) Thanks for the great read, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

haha no lie when I read your favorite lines I was like did I write that or did she add that lol... it's been a while since I've read this and it was nice to go back to the mind set I was in. It's been forever since I've written so thanks for your review my friend :)

[Leena Madhuri]

wow great rhythm.. really enjoyed! :) Thank you!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Leena :) I appreciate your review my friend

[Emily]

Certainly must have been a hard dream to experience for such a heavy poem! Nice work!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :) It was an intense dream haha

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

I think I had those dreams on multiple occasions. Thank goodness it's all just nightmares and our souls are ours to keep when we wake up. You said it very accurately!

On line seven, I think you meant to write "breathe."

[AaronFreitas]

Yes I did mean breathe.... thats what happens when you rush haha... thanks for pointing that out my friend... nothing drives me crazier than grammar errors.

[RiverRei]

LOVE this. This describes a nightmare better than I ever could. I was anxious and scared just reading this haha. Way to go, keep writing. I love stuff like this :) Thank you for sharing!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :) I appreciate your kind words.... brought a smile out of me :)

[RiverRei]

Yay! Knowing that made my day haha :)

[AaronFreitas]

Haha now you're gonna have to comment daily lol

[RiverRei]

I make no promises LOL :P

[nazia]

You did created a nightmare with words Aaron. It was so real, made me anxious.
When you have a nightmare just have a glass of water calm down and go back to sleep.
Nice write :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nazia :) Usually I do get up, walk around and relax before I can go back to sleep. Thank you for your comments :)

[wordman]

sometimes I wonder,they visit me from time to time ,praise god I just roll over and go back to sleep
you wrote a nice write

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend! I appreciate your review.... thats exactly what I try to do and usually have no problem falling back asleep :)

[sinNsincerity]

Hah! 'Twas awesome Aaron! I pray that God takes these anxieties away from you brother,

[AaronFreitas]

I pray too! haha I can't keep waking up scared and trippin! haha thanks buddy I appreciate your kind words!

[andrew mitchell]

A most enjoyable write my friend in the depths of despair shared with great imagery and concise flow. well done friend

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Andrew! I appreciate your review my friend :)

[Melinda McQueen]

Sounds like a nightmare... but alas, God touched your soul and woke you up.
A good write.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Melinda :) I have a lot of crazy dreams and nightmares... this one felt so real. Thank you my friend

[Elisa]

I can definitely hear the desperation in your voice, spiked with fear, which turns to steadfastness in the last line. I really enjoyed the syntax of the piece too. I've seen this rhythm in a few of your other poems (I mean that in a good way), which tells me that this cadence comes completely naturally to you. I love that.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Elisa :) I do enjoy a rhyming scheme and that cadence.... it's an easy rhythm for me to write to. Thanks for your kind words my friend :)

[Elisa]

No problem :)