Was it a dream?

A dream/nightmare I had the other night.... decided to write about it.

I reach for help, no one is there

I try to breathe, gasping for air

Suffocate me, can’t take my soul

Desecrate me, a spirits toll

Try to escape, but I just fall

To my scarred knees, I plod and crawl

Still cannot breathe, frantic for air

Can’t pull away, Lord hear my prayer

Hands cover mouth, death seems so near

Open my eyes, grab rest my fears

For I am awake, twas just a dream

Demons can’t take, my soul from me

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Cherub]

Loved this. My favourite lines were "Hands cover mouth, death seems so near
Open my eyes, grab rest my fears
For I am awake, twas just a dream"
Personally, i think this imagery was fantastic. You really made me and almost feel what was happening. Very fluid with movement and keeps a nice pace. :^) Thanks for the great read, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

haha no lie when I read your favorite lines I was like did I write that or did she add that lol... it's been a while since I've read this and it was nice to go back to the mind set I was in. It's been forever since I've written so thanks for your review my friend :)

[Isabella Disney]

This gave me chills! I feel inspired after reading.. has such a mystical sense, very powerful... I felt like I was transported to dream world while reading!

[Johanna]

Wow this was very very good. One of the best ones I´ve read on here, wonderful write Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Johanna :) Glad you liked it! Thanks for your review :)

[FaeryQueen]

this is sooooooooo sweet! and kind of dark! i like it!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Khatoon :) Dark is usually my style :)

[Irenic]

amazing and brilliant work. your poem is making a complete image of the scene. awesome.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you irenic :) I appreciate you reviewing more of my work :)

[Shawna]

Wow! This is a powerful poem. The imagery and urgency created by your words is awesome. :) Very nice work Aaron, I love every word!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Shawna! Appreciate your review and your kind words :)

[Willard Wells]

Yep that's your work and I like it. I have had the moment of sleep but not sleep and I try to get up and I cannot move. It's as if my body is in one place and by brain in another and they are not communicating. Panic does begin to settle in after what seems like forever and yet it is just seconds. Imagery was very good and I was in that place again. thanks for another great read.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Willard. This one was a real scary one... definitely didn't like the feeling. Appreciate your review :)

[Daisygirl]

My teacher read it over my shoulder and compliments your rhyme and fluidity. I liked the emotion, amazing poem!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha awesome... thank you to your teacher :) lol

[AaronFreitas]

Oh and of course thanks to you too :)

[B]

The last line
Your soul refusing to give up

Going for that push of strength pulling you out of darkness

I love your work
It creates instant images
Strong and defined ones ....

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you I really appreciate your kind words :) You made my night perfect with your compliments :)

[B]

Glad to be of service Buddy :)

[Ilerah]

Decided to read some of your older poems, they are just as good as the first ones. Great job Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ilerah... I've always been a little messed up and twisted haha... I feel like I've grown some as a writer.. hopefully I get better and reach more people :) Appreciate your comments