This is Good-bye

Something that came to mind earlier

I waited patiently for you

Like a child lost in the snow

With no sense of where to go

 

Yet, you never came for me

Like an abandoned puppy

Waiting patiently for a family

 

So now I fade into the night

Without a love in sight

Or the will to continue to fight

 

This is good-bye

 

Author's Note

Review and comment... thanks!

Reviews

[SammMG]

The whole defeated underlined tone of knowing the time has come for a goodbye. It can be so painful, but in the case where saying goodbye and fulling understanding that the time has come for you to part can make the impact that less painful. Very good short, poignant piece right here. Good job.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Samm... much appreciated. Kept this one short and to the point.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

to be ignored, feel lost and abandoned...to feel we don't matter...
like a suicide note...tragic and scary to feel this.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review Jacob... I appreciate you taking the time :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Loneliness is one of the cruelest irony of life. You really have done a great job by writing this.

I liked the metaphors used out there. This is an elegant piece of write.

Thanks for sharing this.

Devanshu

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review... loneliness sucks at times!

[Devanshu Rajput]

You are welcome.

Devanshu

[KelWriter]

Sometimes you place your hopes, dreams and aspirations in people and they let you down. Yet hope keeps you standing still.. It is realization that eventually moves you forward. Great poem

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review... yes I agree sometimes we get let down completely but those things are what build us into who we are.

[Dan_Thywill]

Good bye is the heaviest two-word line to let go off one's mouth. Great piece.

[AaronFreitas]

Yes it is! Thank you for the review :)

[Tania]

Simply meaningful and beautifully written !
-Beyourself

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much!Thanks for taking time to read my work :)

[Emily]

Short, yet complete in its description of sadness. Nice work!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Emily :) I appreciate your comments

[Al]

Nice written! Enjoy read it,Keep it up

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much.... Al?

[Al]

Yeah anytime aaron,

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks my friend :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

This made me feel sad. It reminded me of the way I felt, 5 years ago. Abandoned and heartbroken.
With that being said, it was a great piece. You really know how to reach out and grab the reader. Make them feel the emotions you feel. Great job, Aaron.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ashley :) I appreciate you taking time to read my work... :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

You are welcome darling!

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Aaron that was very good & very deep... I really like it... That is a very good poem that came to your mind... I wish something would pop into my head like that...lol

[AaronFreitas]

Haha thanks very much... check out my new one I just posted :)

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Already did... Lol.. Amazing job ♥

[Deepika]

A long wait when realized to be never fruitful takes a turn of frustration. I could sense the agony and dejection in these lines. Good work Aaron(y)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Deepika! You know I appreciate you stopping by and commenting... thank you :)