This is Good-bye

Something that came to mind earlier

I waited patiently for you

Like a child lost in the snow

With no sense of where to go

 

Yet, you never came for me

Like an abandoned puppy

Waiting patiently for a family

 

So now I fade into the night

Without a love in sight

Or the will to continue to fight

 

This is good-bye

 

Author's Note

Review and comment... thanks!

Reviews

[SammMG]

The whole defeated underlined tone of knowing the time has come for a goodbye. It can be so painful, but in the case where saying goodbye and fulling understanding that the time has come for you to part can make the impact that less painful. Very good short, poignant piece right here. Good job.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Samm... much appreciated. Kept this one short and to the point.

[Brittany Zedalis]

It seems a lot of people can relate to this poem, which is sad in a way. Feeling like this poem conveys is tragic. But this is a good piece nonetheless. Good work.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Luna.... it was kind of a last hope... hoping for the best which never came kind of moment and me realizing that... so thats where they good bye comes in. It's my realization that it's time to move forward. Thank you for the review :)

[Ilerah]

Really good, love the concept, sort, yet a good poem. Well written. Good poem!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ilerah :)

[Ilerah]

welcome mate

[Kylie W.]

I really liked this poem. I could relate to what was being said here, whether about a friendship or relationship. Really fantastic poem.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Kylie :) I appreciate your kind words

[micky]

Dude this awesome i love this piece, please don't ever stop writing

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Micky!!! That means a lot to me... thanks for your kind words.

[HopingStrong]

I relate to this quite a bit in my current situation. Touching. Good write!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for your comments.... glad you can relate my friend :)

[J.R.H.]

Good stuff man. Simple but, very powerful.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review :)

[modtoddinc]

Wow! Very powerful. I really enjoyed this. Few words and extraordinary imagery. Nicely done.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much.... I didn't think much of it when I posted it but people have like it.... I appreciate your kind words :)

[Mary Bradley]

Beautiful poem Aaron Freitas ... such courageous act to be able to say good bye to someone that we've been yearning so much . Not many can do it :-)

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thank you very much Mary! I appreciate your kind words :)

[Kristan A. Mohammed]

These are really awesome words here. And it's so true. We always invest all of our trust in that person whom we hope will never let us down. But apparently they always do. And it hurts us to the point where we have to wonder why we ever trusted them o begin with.
I love your writing style which is simple but yet elegant which I find is most beautiful. And I also loved the different comparisons that were made for the readers to have a clear image of how you feel. Great Job. Stay Inspired.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Kristan! I appreciate your comments my friend :)

[Lizardo]

I can relate to this one (Kind of) A girl I liked, suddenly change and now she's not the same.
You know, this is a really good poem, although its kind of like a move on poem. Its awesome and really helps a lot. Putting your feelings right in place.
We wait patiently for our love one to come and we really love them, but what is the point of loving them if they never even realize our love for them? Yes, its a sad feeling but you know that you just have to back away.... a sad feeling indeed....
Anyways, Aaron, I really like your writing, you're one of the best around here, so yeah. Awesome poem!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Lizardo! I appreciate you and your comments my friend :)

[Lizardo]

You're welcome Aaron! Always a pleasure to read your stuff