Unstable

Some thoughts going through this journey we call life

Unstable, like a newborn giraffe

Legs are crumbling, struggling to hold

Falling, like leaves from an old oak tree

Shattered like pieces from a dropped glass

 

Need supreme strength to re-mold myself

Strong like the Egyptian pyramids,

Permanent like the Mayan ruins

Strength that’s as durable as graphene

 

It’s time to rebuild myself

And start this life all over

Create a purpose in life

Find ways, inspire others

 

Reviews

[Irenic]

Unstable, like a newborn giraffe
Legs are crumbling, struggling to hold
Falling, like leaves from an old oak tree
Shattered like pieces from a dropped glass

reality

It’s time to rebuild myself
And start this life all over
Create a purpose in life
Find ways, inspire others

inspirational


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like it.

thanks for sharing

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much irenic :) Sometimes life feels that way but you gotta find strength any where you can :)

[Irenic]

Welcome...........:)

[nazia]

Liked all the comparisons you wrote.. Especially the new born giraffe one. thumbs up for that :)
Life is all about moving on and in the process discovering oneself.. Great write :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Nazia! I liked the giraffe one... I'm not even really sure how that came into my thoughts but it started it all.

[Deepika]

Wow Aaron! Loved the way you've structured it..Few instances that depict the unstable/feeble states followed by the sturdy examples and the end has the desire to rejuvenate into a stronger being. Good job:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Deepika :) I always appreciate you taking time to look at my work and comment... Thanks!

[sereenaoutloud]

great write aaron and makes me what to get up and create a new purpose too!
Also...sorry gotta say it ...aw how cute is that baby giraffe? :)

[AaronFreitas]

Haha I think if I just posted the giraffe it would get more comments it's so cute! haha thanks for the review :)

[sereenaoutloud]

lol funny.. but soooo not true...your writings speaks for itself...cutie giraffe or not lol

[AaronFreitas]

haha thanks I appreciate your kind words... making me blush over here :)

[~]

Hang in there my friends. Baby giraffes do not stay babies all their lives. :) Great metaphors and analogies Aaron!! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much :)

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Another great poem I got analyze this in a thousand different ways exactly how art should be, the flow is perfect, the length and the imagery I really like this one well done!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much...I actually paid attention with keeping the same syllables in each stanza and all that haha... glad you liked it Ally :)

[ANTO]

Very admirable sentiments throughout this one Aaron.
Death and rebirth. Classic!

Loved those similes you used - the young giraffe is just adorable and I mean, who doesnt like references to ancient Maya and Egypt - this is right up my street my friend.
Its a motivational piece that gets my vote mate.
:))

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much... that is one cute Giraffe! haha thanks for the review

[Jamestown]

What is going on today did all my friends eat there flipping weaties this
morning, the quality of poetry is high today! Praise the Lord!
this is killer, going to favorites! Slow down race horses
and let old JT catch up, lol:) Thanks for sharing your amazing poetry and b-blessed!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha woke up in some kind of mood to write today... thanks for the kind words!

[sinNsincerity]

This is a good write man!

[sereenaoutloud]

James...lol weaties! :)