Dancing with demons

Today was one of the hardest days ever... my 10 year old daughter left her mother to come live with me on her birthday. She just wants to be loved and my ex wife puts her feelings last. Angry write

I’ve never met anyone as selfish as you 

In my past I was dumb enough to love you

Even though I am thankful for all I have in life

I wish I never met you and never made you my wife

I hate the way you treat our kids

Push aside their feelings for your own happiness

While our daughter sits by your side and cries

You push her away looking deep into his eyes

Does it bother you now that your daughter left you?

On her 10th birthday she decided to walk away from you

She chose to have the caring love from her father

Rather than chasing the love she cant get from her mother

You want to call and cry on the phone

Yet your daughter is firm, she's not going home

She pleaded for your love and a little of your time

You chose to ignore her and drink to ease you mind

Karma is a b***h and she comes back to bite

This time I can say it serves you right

You have been dancing with demons way too long

Take the time to love your daughters before you’re gone

Author's Note

Not my best but it's an angry I just need to get it out write.... thanks

Reviews

[JerryB]

Hey! When our feelings push to be expressed in verse, there are no "best." But after I finished reading this poem I considered it a grand, if sad write. It is sad because of the reason your daughter wants to live with you, but happy for the same reason. She knows you love her.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Jerry.... she does know she is loved by me and I make sure of that each day.... thanks for the review

[sereenaoutloud]

wow this is so raw and strong. You can feel the frustration and anger flying off the page. Im sos sorry your daughter has to go through this but glad obviously has a great dad she can turn to! great write ...if kind of had a rapping type beat to it which added to the anger!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I disagree I think this is one of your best i love the raw emotion, the intensity of the reality of the situation, the rhythmic beat and flow alike it's perfect. Well done!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ally? I assume your name is Ally haha if not correct me. my raw emotion just get it out writes are always my favorites. Sometimes people critique because syllables dont match up and its not along the lines of what they like but I just enjoy getting it out :) Thanks!

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

Yes it's Ally :)

[AaronFreitas]

Well its nice to officially meet you Ally :)

[RattyAdalan]

I see a lot of emotion there... I can't say more. The reader can feel what the author feels. Look into his soul, and see his world by his eyes. Is amazing and terrified. I read it I suffered with you. I can't say more...

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much for the review :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Man this is some heavy duty s**t. I can't abide by a woman who doesn't put her children above all else. It's just not natural

[AaronFreitas]

I agree... it is driving me nuts. It's one thing to say they come first and another to show it with actions. Thanks for the review!

[Ana B.]

Oh man, Karma is a b***h, that's right penned. The good part is that your daughter knows real love now :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Ana! It's frustrating because here we are a week later and the same thing... sucks for my girls because they do want to spend time with their mom.

[Ana B.]

it will get better. it always does.

[AaronFreitas]

That's what I am praying for... my daughter's are with me all asleep... it's good no complaints. :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

actually this was really really good..
I'm sorry that you and your girls have to go through this kind of stuff..
I don't know your ex wife but I don't want to. Sorry to say that, but women like her make it bad for girls like me who would give anything to have a loving husband and kids that adore her...

anyways,
great emotional piece, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks Nikki!

[GreenEyedPoet]

I can relate to this way to much... Makes me kinda sad..
Sorry this happened, but glad to hear she made the decision to come live with you, sounds like she's better off doing that.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much.... I went through this same thing growing up and I know how much it sucked... I just hate that my girls have to go through it. Thanks for the review!

[GreenEyedPoet]

It does sucks they have to go through it, but if they're with you it's better then them staying with your ex.

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah thats the hard part... girls want their mom and they want to be there but they love when they are with me. They see her dark side way too often and they worry about her too and don't want her to be alone. It's a s****y situation but I have them as much as I can.

[GreenEyedPoet]

Totally know how they feel...

[ANTO]

You let this out and theres more room for the love to flood in my friend. Its a pity for all concerned that you didnt get to write the poem you originally had in mind for your daughter - maybe that'll come next ??
Despite it being as you say 'an angry write' there is real compassion for the mother of your daughter in the final two lines.
This is a healthy way to channel the neg. Kudos

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you ANTO... there's a lot of feelings that range from anger to compassion... I want the best for my girls and it get frustrating. Writing is definitely a better way to release those feelings and vent rather than do anything else. Thanks for the review brother!

[ANTO]

True that Aaron - true that bro

[armin]

You are right, it came out from an angry heart. A heart burning in anger and exploded, spilled out some aggression, hatred and annoyance.

You push her away looking deep into his eyes

It should be 'her eyes'.

armin. ...

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Armin for the review. I was definitely pissed off that night... still am about that situation... thanks for taking time to read my words.