The Sharpness of this Blade

This is about a person I know who was/is a cutter

  Take this blade and slice just a bit

  The dripping blood provides a rush

  Provides an escape from the truth of life

  If I cut too deep, dreams would be crushed

  My mind drifts slowly into oblivion

  My soul rests free from the trap of my mind

  I hold my breath to slow my heart

  Escape is what I have been waiting to find

  I slit my wrist to ease my pain

  My soul is broken, cant hide the tears 

  If anyone knew they would say I’m insane

  To cut is easier than dealing with my fears

  With this blade I set myself free

  No one else will see my sins

  Shame covered up by a smile on my face

  Until the day I slip and this blade wins

Author's Note

Please review and let me know your thoughts.... and no it's not about me :)

Reviews

[Angela Sparks]

This captures the thoughts when you do it and after. Not so much the fear of slipping up with the blade but the shear pain of facing what we fear. Then to get away from the emotional pain, we create a different kind of pain in which to focus and somehow I feel as of you were able insert that all in this one poem. Very good. An amazing piece:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Angela. I had the fear of slipping part because the person I wrote this about once told me how she accidentally went to deep or something and was scared to death she actually hurt herself. I am glad you liked it and found that it is close to the real pain shared by people :)

[Ankita]

I loved the line "escape is what i have been waiting for"

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you I like that line too... sometimes we just wait for escape from the things going on in our lives :)

[Ankita]

Yes. we definitely do..

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Having worked all of my life in mental health services I really feel this one as it is the real representation of thinking of someone who feels hopless, worthless and angry with the world and to whom the pain of secretly cutting provides temporary relief

[AaronFreitas]

I agree... this one wasn't a personal one meaning I am not the cutter but I have known people that have been or are cutters and it's a very dark way of coping with the pain of life. Appreciate the review my friend... thank you!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That is a relief Aaron. Thank God.

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed... I am glad to have never had that issue nor a thought of doing it.

[Daisygirl]

Wow, great job, you really captured the feeling of those moments.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Daisygirl :) Appreciate your compliment very much

[andrew mitchell]

despair, hopelessness, unloved, misunderstood, needing help. very sad my friend. the torment excruciating!

[AaronFreitas]

Yes indeed my friend! Thank you for the review... always appreciated :)

[sereenaoutloud]

This is very detailed Aaron and captures the incident perfectly! It feels very personal like a journal entry especially with you writing it from the cutters perspective. fantastic write :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :) It wasn't me... but it was someone I knew who struggled with cutting. I tried to channel that emotion. Thanks for the review my friend :)

[sereenaoutloud]

yeh i know i actually didn't forget to read the note this time (I'm really bad at forgetting to do that lol) You really did channel the emotion and it shows! Great piece.

[AaronFreitas]

haha I do that a lot... rush to get into the read and miss the note :) thanks friend you are awesome... must be a Cali thing haha

[sereenaoutloud]

lol....:))

[micky]

Wow this is amazing truly there are no words to describe this piece im breathless

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Micky... I appreciate that!

[Dawn]

It seems a lot of people do this now. I've seen some very horrible pictures of it. And I've tried it myself before. There seems to be a lot of hopelessness in the world. If only people could reach out and find camaraderie and help, instead of harming themselves.
I love the way you wrote this, with the rhymes, and it really drives the point home. Well done.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Dawn :)

[the writer of woe]

I get the overall theme, but it seems like its geared toward whiny teenagers who know half a wit about anything. It seems too immature of a poem, and should be given a more sad attempt. Read it again and try to see where I'm coming from.

[AaronFreitas]

Since the person in mind is a whiny teenager that's what it was geared toward. It was strictly about this persons words to be before and the way she feels about it as a cutter. Thanks for the review

[the writer of woe]

Oh ok, I get it. That insight helps the emotion be felt.

[AaronFreitas]

Yeah the person is or was a 14 year old cutter so I was trying to stay true to the emotions she had. Thanks

[RubyOmma]

Please read my poem Lost, it is about the same thing. I like this. Nicely written, I like the end line the best, With this blade I set myself free
No one else will see my sins
Shame covered up by a smile on my face
Until the day I slip and this blade wins

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you I will check out lost also :)

[RubyOmma]

Thanks I appreciate it :)