Lust

About a woman who comes along in a mans darkest hours and wants nothing but to fill his emptiness, not with love but with lust

At one of the darkest times in my life

I searched for a way to get over my wife

Somehow we were meant to meet,

You came in and swept me off my feet

 

The more we talk the more I like

The more it seems the moment is right

You fill my mind with naughty thoughts

Like one of those cheesy porno plots

 

You set it straight right from the start

That someday we will be apart

Even if it is just for fun and games

Your presence is slowly easing my pain

 

I can’t wait until we finally meet

And I can slowly kiss you until we sleep

When we cuddle the pain will ease

Until then you’ll fill my dreams 

Author's Note

Please review let me know your thoughts. I'm a rookie but enjoy writing down some thoughts.

Reviews

[JayceeC]

Aaron,
This is not really all that bad. Yes the rhyme schemes are simple but it has a good rhythm and flow, so the bones are there my man. The word choice does not mark it as immature either. Writing is one of those things that change over time. My stuff has a much tighter structure now, but occasionally I fall back into the longer prose style. It's still a valid style, but perhaps not the one I'm wanting to play with at the time.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Jan :) Looking back and reading stuff I wrote even in December when I first joined this site and started writing again... it's kind of crazy because I can always tell where I was mentally when I wrote the piece. I didn't edit, review and put as much effort in my writings then as I do now. But it was still me... just feel like I am growing more recently. :)

[JayceeC]

You are. some of the older stuff I have posted does not feel like me now. I'm about to start putting up my grittier work I think and maybe some of my lyrics. I look at them and wonder about that sad and angry woman, even knowing it was me. It's kind of odd now...some of them are 10 years old, but it's almost like looking at a stranger, except I can feel her emotions, as clear as day. I call them my diary pieces. They are a good reminder or how far we've come.

[AaronFreitas]

It is a good reminder. Some of my stuff comes out dark and I know where I am at mentally even though I'm happy and not in that dark place. It's almost like I write, it's over and I'm good after that. I used to sing in a local rock band and had a ton of songs written... lost them all. It sucks... a big part of my writings are gone.

[JayceeC]

I used to record some of mine on my old phone...unfortunately I never transferred them and some of the tunes are gone. I was looking at one earlier, and the chorus is there but the vereses are not. It's heck getting old.

[AaronFreitas]

haha I hear ya!

[cloakedone]

interesting,very emtionaly free..

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :)

[cloakedone]

nothing to it aaron

[marcus]

sexual healing! Always valuable
I thought this poem was very good!

[AaronFreitas]

Haha definitely sexual healing! haha thanks Marcus I appreciate the review

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Sometimes all we need is another person to fill the void and pain inside... Like you said it doesn't have to be love and forever... Just fun for now... In whatever way that may be. I like the thoughts you captured here. Well done. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for the review :) you are absolutely right... sometimes we just need something temporary and fun to enjoy life the way it is meant to be enjoyed.