Empty and Alone

A story about a man who has lost everything and finds himself empty and alone.

There’s a time in life when we face our fears

The sounds of silence rest deaf in our ears

Reach out to grasp you with my lonesome hand

Desolate feeling sinking in quick sand

 

Deep inside of my impotent soul

My shortfalls suddenly take their toll

Empty tears pour down my somber face

Ponder how I arrived at this place

 

I’m lonely, struggle in my search for life

The harder I try, the faster I die

Unfocused, cannot seem to find my way

Desperate and worn like a lonely stray

 

Continue to fight to find some meaning

But my soul insists that I stop dreaming

I never wanted to be so alone

I live empty inside, I should have known

 

Take my hands and set me free

Take my soul and disown me

 

Author's Note

Writing some darker stuff, lots of thoughts in my mind. Let me know what you think

Reviews

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH GOODNESS! I really don't have a word to describe this write. It's so deep, Touching, full of truth. And I can relate this poetry to myself. My favorite stanza is "Continue to fight to find some meaning
But my soul insists that I stop dreaming
I never wanted to be so alone
I live empty inside, I should have known"
Really, this one touched the core of my heart. It feels like U have written this line for me :D Thanks for sharing amazing poetry!

[AaronFreitas]

Awww thanks... you went way back for this one haha... this is one of my first ones on here :) I am glad you like it :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

Yup! I loved it so much. I am checking your old work. I am quite enjoying this!

[Carrie.]

"Take my soul and disown me." This makes such an impact on the reader, on me, it's powerful. I feel like the beat got lost here and there, but overall it was on point in regards to rhyme and meter.

It was a good read, dark but it needed to be and it wasn't approached in a cliché way, it was original and full of emotion.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend... I try to write with the feelings and passion inside... not from some witty cliche perspective :) I appreciate your comment my friend

[Ilerah]

Well written, it is darker yah, but its great. Personally I like darker poems a little more than most of the others, good job.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Ilerah... I am a fan of the darker works myself :)

[Ilerah]

Well, they are just better.

[modtoddinc]

Wow, Aaron... definitely dark... left me feeling sad. You have done an excellent job with this poem as, at least for this reader, I want to reach out and help this person. There are no good answers really, to me its just about reaching out and being present with another's pain. The imagery is great, and it spirals down to a bleakness that is thick like syrup. Thanks for sharing your poetry.

~peace, Todd

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Todd. It was definitely a darker moment in life when I wrote this piece. Thanks for your comments.

[Karen Arizona]

Your poem, 'Empty and Alone,' is heartfelt, Aaaron. I really sense your struggle. I'm happy to read your response to Perkele.7885, that you feel you are in a better place now. I agree that it's interesting to read back on the older poems we write to see how our feelings have changed. Please keep writing and I will keep reading. I appreciate your creativity.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Karen. I appreciate your comments. I remember feeling stuck, empty and alone. It wasn't too long after my split from my ex wife so it was a hard time learning to be on my own and just starting life over. Looking back I can see how far I've come even though at times it doesn't feel so. Thanks for your review :)

[micky]

This is a amazingly powerful piece.....i can feel the raw emotion....i love this piece and i think ur words are beautiful
Well done Aaron:! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Micky :) This was back in December when I first got back into writing more and was coming out of an extremely dark place. Thank you

[micky]

Honestly Aaron I find that i can.only really enjoy dark writing i cant handle the happy sappy s**t.......

[AaronFreitas]

Awesome... i have a difficult time writing nice happy stuff haha

[micky]

Same here and if i manage a happy poem,i hate the way it sounds...

[Jamestown]

Great flowing write!
long suffering is mentioned over 300 times in the New Testament alone,
we are pre warned that there are going to be some tough times in our crazy
lives, and it sounds like you are going through one now, you know what you
need to do:) Wording, flow and message crystal clear! PTL
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you James... this is one of my earlier writes. I cleaned it up a little and featured it. I was in a darker place just months ago when I joined. Even though some of my writings are dark I am in a much better place mentally and spiritually :) Thank you my friend

[Perkele.7885]

This is quite a pickle that you have written about here. There is no easy fix The poem is quite detailed. If I was this fellow and I had any desire to live, I would head for my denominational church or any church to get right with the Lord and get Food and shelter. If I was dirty, I would then work on getting clean and finding a purpose.
Then the road is yours to lead you.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend :) I have been on a much better path both mentally and spiritually since I wrote this. It was kind of cool to go back and remember where I was when I wrote this poem. Thanks for your review :)

[SCRIBBLER]

This story inspired me to face my fears. This was a brilliant piece if writing. Keep it up!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you my friend.. I appreciate it :)

[Natalie]

Hi there! Really liked the rhyming in this poem, and it flowed very nicely. Great job!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for the review Natalie :) Appreciate you taking tome and glad you enjoyed it.