The Trap

Short poem about being trapped in life with no where to go.

I sit alone consumed by my thoughts

Is there anyone that understands me?

I fail in life time and time again

Does anyone notice me?

 

I live to fight another day

The pain never fades away

I see no light at the end of the tunnel

Does that mean death is coming for me?

 

I breathe another breath

Exhale another death

Close my eyes pretend to die

I open only to see new life

 

In my struggles I learn to cope

Failure does not define me

The warm embrace of starting over again

Like being reborn in new skin

 

Blink; blink to wash away my sight

Hold my breath to feel alive

Another day will soon begin

Where I relive the hell within

Author's Note

First post ever... be blunt... thanks!

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

It helps to read these lines for me, to remind me of what it was life when I felt like that and be able to contrast my life then to now and be more content with what is a surplus of the things about me, we need to have an exchange of spiritual produce, what one is too much surrounded by or lacking must be gotten, it is obvious that you need something very important and must not fail to seek it or strive after it, it could be something like going on a hike or working out and eating a salad, and finding what it is about the girl of your dreams either in abstract or reality really gets you going, of course I don't know what your life is like outside of these emotions recorded on the page here, what are the struggles you are facing? Very nice poem,

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you for the feedback. The struggles aren't my own... I put myself into the position of someone I know well and wrote from their perspective on how I would feel in that situation. It was just something to try. I have been there before years ago... that is when I used to write a lot of dark poems... nothing that I ever published or even saved.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A most sad reflective refrain that flows with pathos and honesty and resolve Aaron

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much John... this was one of the first poems I wrote when I got back to writing in December. :)

[fattycbreezy52]

Such a great poem for those who feel ignored.
Infact,all of us feel this trapped thing at some point in our life.
Love your poems and line of writing.They deal with basic human emotions:)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much. I was telling Nisreenaa this was one of the first ones I wrote when I got back to writing in December. I appreciate your review and your kind words... it really means a lot :)

[B]

Oh my
The heaviness of sadness
And the little crack of light coming through
I say
Let it shine
You have a way with words

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nisreenaa... this is one of my first poems when I started writing again. A lot of emotions i put into this write so I am glad you like it :)

[Metal Orchid]

'Failure does not define me
The warm embrace of starting over again
Like being reborn in new skin' - This should be a continuous affair mate, cheers!

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for your feedback really appreciate it :)

[Metal Orchid]

you are welcome , mate :)

[Megan]

First poem ever? I dig it. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Not my first ever but the first one in years and first one I've ever posted or showed to anyone :)

[Megan]

Oops. Congrats on being brave. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks... and thanks for feeback on my story... I'm learning so everything helps :)