I Still Care

Even if you don't.

You say you don't feel the spark anymore

You don't seem to understand

My legs go so weak I could fall to the floor

You make it hard to stand.

I would see those sparks shine in your eyes

Whenever they weren't hidden in your hair

It makes me pleased that you don't often tell lies

But sometimes the truth can be hard to bear.

I saw sparks in your beautiful, natural smile

Felt them with the touch of your skin

The time we spent really was worthwhile

But now I'm left dreaming up what could have been.

 

I know it's only been a few days

But I can still smell you on my clothes

My mind is full of all these sad cliches

And I guess through my actions it shows.

I'm trying my best to forget silly things

Such as the beating warmth from your heart

Through my head, your laugh softly rings

I'm not planning on falling apart.

I would take those chances to punch you in the arm

But I know that's something I can't do

Even though you hurt me, I don't want to cause you harm

I only want what's best for you.

Author's Note

tried to put a bit of rhythm in it

Reviews

[Eddy Jones]

The whole picture a creative joy. Voting high and here's to many more.
Eddy.

[Michael G. Smith]

It pains me to read poems such as this, going through many relationships. Now, that many years ago I ask God and he brought my soulmate into my life and that each day since has been more in love it pains to think others have not found theirs. You've brought this sense of feelings out of your words.

[poetickeys]

I love this. People can easily relate, showing just how alike we all are as a people.

I'm new to this site and would appreciate if you would give feedback on my first piece if you have the time. Thanks

[KurKota]

You have captured the rhythm within this piece, yes. The topic of frustrated affection is related well, in this piece. Your writing style here does bring the reader into your pain felt. Good job in creating this piece. Thank you for sharing.

[KurKota]

The rhythm in this piece is detectable...yes. The effort reflects the emotionality you felt in writing it. Nice job. I appreciate your sharing with the reader, the baring of your emotions for us to see. That takes strength. Good job.

[Shawna]

Beautiful. It's so painful to let someone go when you want them so bad. But you're a better person for just wishing them the best. Great write!