always such drama

its hard to see that i cried
the bitterness can subside
i can not believe that
this can be happening flat

but maybe i am too obsessive
you want to be too possessive
the girl can not get her breath
then it is to be her death

but you just make a story
you can not have the glory
if you smudge the lady
you are such a grudge and shady

the heart i feel was my own
all i want to do was to go home
to hide my face in shame
and you it was nothing but a game

 

Reviews

[poddar kushal]

the rhythmic escape for your emotion
congratulation

[Dave]

Lots of good imagery. Good form as well. You're definitely growing as a poet.

[thecoolone52]

Woah.... your getin wayyyy better compared to the first few poems that i read of yours..... i like the gray color and size of the font as well......... Stylish........ anyway nice write.... good luck

[Danielle Asher]

sharp pain, obviously very deeply hurt by someone that can not be trusted.
the bold large print makes for words that need to be read, need to be heard- i like that.
nice work!

peace,
D

[larryb]

Well done C very nice....

[A.r. Bazian]

honest confrontation!
i like!
the poem is enjoyable! the rhyme scheme is nice! rather skillful!

keep it up!
i've only recently been capable of writing direct poetry!
i've never been good at it!
so do not take my word for last... but i personally think its a nice poem!