What Kind Of Life Is Living You?

You look like a clean cut version, 

of every woman in this town. 

You’ve got the same individual opinions,

as everyone else around. 

And well you got,

the same haircut, that she do. 

Dear Friend, let me serve it to you bluntly 

you are being fake, why kind of life, is living you?

They see him driving, that new automobile,

don’t know that it was given to me.

Think because I live in this town,

I’m squandering some sense of, royal opportunity. 

Got no physical scars, 

doesn't mean he hasn’t been stabbed, a time or two.  

I might make up excuses, but then I gotta ask,

what kind of life is living you?

Good and bad, surly I’ve been weak,

I’ve been afraid 

I guess if I want to be a good man,

Im going to have to piss someone off,

day after day. 

I’ve held this smile for years now darling, 

so ill smile for you? What more can I say?

Difference between a nice guy and a good man, 

is that only one, is judging, 

the others way.

-By Eric Weick 

Reviews

[Frontier]

This reminded me of all those books about early 20th century America...when people were still living rigid "gender/family" roles, like Revolutionary Road and The Great Gatsby, even Gone with the wind, in this line "I’ve held this smile for years now darling,
so ill smile for you? What more can I say?"

Interesting poem.

[Eric Weick]

Thank you Frontier.

[Ashira Macy]

I am glad that someone chose to stick with the "losing a friend" theme, I thought that one might be understated among the other prompts. Loved that you turned it around so that a life was living the person instead of the other way around. It sometimes seems that way when we get swept up in all of the chaos and pressure life puts us through. And then you end on an almost accepting note. Melancholy because your friend is not who they once were, but still trying to be the support that they need. Really well done on this one.

[Eric Weick]

Thank you for the in depth review Ashira. I love the feedback.

[hawraa17th]

amazing work! thank you for writing such a beautiful poem

[Eric Weick]

Thank you for reading it hawraa17th.