Spider To A Snake

She was a devil, 
but you looked at her,
like an angel from above.
I watched her serenade this fool,
changing from a spider, 
to his love.
I watched her,
as she did contort,
this innocent fool of the sort.
His heart, 
and her hands.
I watched her sink her teeth into this man. 
I watched her, 
as a spectator, 
zoo la de’ fake 
I watched her in horror, 
As she grew, 
from a spider to a snake.

-by Eric Weick.

Reviews

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

She was a devil,
but you looked at her,
like an angel from above.

^ This is an amazing introduction, it really pulls the reader in and makes them wonder what else you have to say about these two people and why was she so bad. It begs questioning and screams with uncertainty. I love that. It definitely did the trick. I also like that this introduction was directed right at someone specific and even though a reader knows it's not them, for some reason they are even more interested in the write.

I watched her serenade this fool,

^ I like how you are calling him a fool for being unable to see what is really happening.

changing from a spider,
to his love.

^ This is interesting, it says a whole lot without really saying anything at all.

I watched her,
as she did contort,
this innocent fool of the sort.

^ I like that this moved the story on and still left an impact on the audience.

His heart,
and her hands.

^ I love the feeling of vulnerability you gave this character and how you did it so subtly.

I watched her sink her teeth into this man.
I watched her,
as a spectator,
zoo la de’ fake
I watched her in horror,
As she grew,
from a spider to a snake.

^ This is an amazing ending; it really shows the true character of these people, it describes what certain emotions and ideas can do to you. Amazing write.

[Eric Weick]

Thank you PaintedPheonix, this is maybe the best review I've ever received on a poem. I love that this is what you got from it all.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Yep we all know such women.
Met a few myself.
A great poem.

[Eric Weick]

Thank you Mad Englishman.

[Frontier]

Yikes! That is one scary female! lol!

[Eric Weick]

She is. Thanks Frontier.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

There are those attracted to such...
and their too blinded by the beauty of its all on the outside...
that the spider spins her web faster and faster...
there is only one thing left to do...
is watch and unfold every once of his blood and soul...
and make him bleed out...for all its worth...
and off to the next victim while the beauty last...

[Eric Weick]

Thank you Glen.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...