You are...

You are...

You are a diamond blooming in the heavens;

A tangible source of everlasting love.

You feed on what is below and above.

You curl yourself in times of weakness,

Around  gallant poles stuck not within holes;

You roam through sea's skies and meadows.

You bow to all who cross you;

A courteous defeat surrounds you.

You are the epitome of self righteousness.

You shadow the beauty in the world;

An apprentice of love and courage.

You are moonlight in the palm of my hands.

You are the dance that has not been danced;

A step or two in the right direction.

Your smile is at least infectious.

You stay inside and play outside;

You see the evil like the good would.

You unfold mysteries linking life and death.

You are rain upon a rainbow;

A piece of the puzzle of life.

You interrupt anger and summon bliss.

You collide with the stars out your window.

You form approximate innuendos.

You glisten with diamonds around you-

While the sun shines behind you-

You levitate with open arms;

I've seen your gentle charm.

You are,

Simply magnetic;

Your fields green and abundant.

You are,

Overly beautiful.

Your eyes a world for one to see into.

You are...

Everything.

Chris Holmberg

Author's Note

I think I am in love...

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

much advice you're given here! but remember this:

the artistic value of any poem, song, story etc is determined by a few simple things-

1. How real is it to the reader? How much does it invite the reader to participate or contribute to it from their own reality, ideas etc?
2. Does it have adequate technique to produce an emotional impact?

And really, that is about all! There really is NO set rules about how it has to be done. Individual people like whatever THEY like...it can be in perfect meter and rhyme or it can be in total freestyle non-rhyming UNmetered clubfooted anomaly and be a stunner!

I thought your piece was AWESOME! It communicates purely and has great impact and is metaphorically fresh and lacking in "cliche" sentiment.

VERY WELL DONE!

[Kelley Quinn]

This is so beautiful.
Who you're in love with? Give it to them. I'm sure they will love to hear this from you..it's amazing.

[Brad Bramble]

This is great, the imagery is truly just awesome. I absolutely love the line "You are a diamond blooming in the heavens", its just really quite poetic. As I read it, I feel somewhat detached from actuality. Personally, I think that's a mark of great writing. Its one thing for a poem to need its own reality to be able to express its message accurately, but its a completely separate thing when the poet is skillful enough to create that reality. Its something I know I strive for in my writing, and I'm very pleased to see another writer expressing the same concept. WIthout a doubt, you've achieved something with this poem.

Keep up the good work,

Brad.

[TTBoy28]

You truly ARE in love! Very nice, Chris!

[Brad Baum]

Absolutely beautiful. Are you sure it's just an "I think"? Incredibly intense and real imagery, with an array of metaphors throughout the poem that actually speak, have a voice, say something to the reader. You see the evil like the good would - what a fantastic line. Fantastic as a whole, really. Great work, I really enjoyed reading.

[Timtim]

Sorry for delaying to look at this poem... The choice of wording is carefully chosen, properly done. However i think with long poems you might want to give some sort of heirachy so that the piece picks up as we keep reading, to main intrest. Because after a short while, we'd get to understand that this person means the world to you. Maybe attach a story line to it, or another concept to give double meaning and keep us reading. But otherwise i think it's a good piece, and has potential to be an even greater piece.

[guiltyascharged]

This was... almost too good. I couldn't stop reading until the end. I honestly love this write. Remarkable. Such good word choice and such nice flow. Incredible.

[:)]

This is beautiful :)
I'd say someone has falling over for sure.
The word choice flows very nicely and well
I hope she is as beautiful as you say. :)

[Angel of Disease]

Something about this poem has me captivated. Possibly your choice and placement of the words? I don't know. But what i do know is, the flow of the poem makes me feel like I'm floating on a river of moon beams. Also for some strange reason I imagine a ballerina sleeping in a bed of flowers. hmm...
Keep up the beautiful work.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I think you are too and sound like she’s your, everything, cool! Nice work Keep on writing.

[Drey Mitchell]

Beautiful and very well written ! The person who inspired you this writing should be very proud !