You are...

You are...

You are a diamond blooming in the heavens;

A tangible source of everlasting love.

You feed on what is below and above.

You curl yourself in times of weakness,

Around  gallant poles stuck not within holes;

You roam through sea's skies and meadows.

You bow to all who cross you;

A courteous defeat surrounds you.

You are the epitome of self righteousness.

You shadow the beauty in the world;

An apprentice of love and courage.

You are moonlight in the palm of my hands.

You are the dance that has not been danced;

A step or two in the right direction.

Your smile is at least infectious.

You stay inside and play outside;

You see the evil like the good would.

You unfold mysteries linking life and death.

You are rain upon a rainbow;

A piece of the puzzle of life.

You interrupt anger and summon bliss.

You collide with the stars out your window.

You form approximate innuendos.

You glisten with diamonds around you-

While the sun shines behind you-

You levitate with open arms;

I've seen your gentle charm.

You are,

Simply magnetic;

Your fields green and abundant.

You are,

Overly beautiful.

Your eyes a world for one to see into.

You are...

Everything.

Chris Holmberg

Author's Note

I think I am in love...

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

much advice you're given here! but remember this:

the artistic value of any poem, song, story etc is determined by a few simple things-

1. How real is it to the reader? How much does it invite the reader to participate or contribute to it from their own reality, ideas etc?
2. Does it have adequate technique to produce an emotional impact?

And really, that is about all! There really is NO set rules about how it has to be done. Individual people like whatever THEY like...it can be in perfect meter and rhyme or it can be in total freestyle non-rhyming UNmetered clubfooted anomaly and be a stunner!

I thought your piece was AWESOME! It communicates purely and has great impact and is metaphorically fresh and lacking in "cliche" sentiment.

VERY WELL DONE!

[CoalHeart]

only thing that i found that interrupted me was this line

Your smile is at least infectious.

with such flawlessness throughout your poem this line puts hesitation on the flow for one reason or another everyone could find their own

no matter what a poem is a poem if you enjoy it no guidelines needed for expression

[Ice QueenJen]

you convey the feelings of being in love very nicely, and a great feeling to be in too. I love the layout of your writing too!

[Warren L.G De Mills]

Good job man! . you really struck me with this . I really like all the things you compare the "you" to. brilliantly executed.

[Accardi16]

:D Awesome Poem ... I Love IT

[Jen]

sweet.

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

You say that "you think you're in love"? I think it's safe to say you're about as in love as it's possible to be judging by this poem!

To me this poem is something of a mixed bag. It has a huge amount of emotion and you clearly want to shout your message to the world but sometimes this energy carries you off in a strange direction. For instance, the line "you are moonlight in the palm of my hands" is nicely poetic and quite classical. However, it comes at a time when I'm still somewhat staggered from the "poles not stuck within holes line". There's either something desperately Freudian about this or you've allowed yourself to be carried a little too far.

So, what would I suggest as a golden nugget of advice? Calm down - just a little. Don't lose touch with the emotional fireworks that are going on in your head but just tone down the euphoria before we all get singed eybrows!

[KellieJeanne]

This is so beautiful, it shows the true love you feel. Not just some sappy poem about feeling a certain way about someone. Truly putting your love into writing.

[Ashley]

Such a cheesy sweet and beautiful poem.

[Siddhartha]

brims with love and romance...delightful...as delightful as love itself...