Yanni' song.

Red eyed and flown so high,
I warp through time, not a minute goes by.
While the drumbeat, pounds my skull
I await the ambush of not a thing at all.

My arms rise to a perpendicular state,
As my body begins to deteriorate.
Not a tear sheds from my frowned eye,
when everything around me, is my crowned demise.

Startled by sounds of coming debris
I Roll my agile mischief to a common degree.
I  proceed to hide in the patterned leafs for ever.
Clever it may have been, but now never remembered

Red eyed and flowing endlessly,
I backlash a moment to conceive the constituency.
Ripping apart my open alliteration,
I hear the sounds, of a modern invasion.
Creation.

Author's Note

What do you think? :P

Reviews

[Rory CJ Frankson]

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Yanni the keyboardist composer? Just a question mind, as I sort through your articulations. I just watched a concert of his on PBS here in Vernon BC the night before last. It was a moving experience to listen to as a musician, not of his calabre of course. So I was reading your writ here with a reference of such in mind or your title. I think it is a dashing sort of free form prose, with careful word choice to render me speachless, and chuckle friend.
Just a little.

I'm to be impressed I'd imagine, and not to be facetious. No, not at all. As I craft vocabulary daily and if asked what I think, will always strive to be honest. "Red eyed," were you smoken reefer when you wrote this? I'm teasing, testing a little... as you've just sent me a Friend Request. "I Roll my agile mischief to a common degree." I look to compile significant reference to your prose phasing for confirmation to meanings that possibley are illusive in your purported context.

As I search for Yanni's Song, is it a reference to his music and you his concieved constituant? Does he have a political party, I know knothing of? Maybe hidden distructive notes that invade your commentary? Well enough, a little fun with word play, eh what! I think you may have a masterful command of vocabulary.

I'm a little lost to the drift of this piece, other than it appears well crafted. Hey maybe send me a short dissertation on its relative appropriation as to the medium and use of this title in proportion to word use by the Stanza. That'd be interesting. Feel up for it?

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Write On / Right On! Romon in Review. Peace, nice phrasing

[Kaela Craven]

Dude, you're stoned :)

[Alice]

I like this poem a lot. I have not read much of your poetry (to be honest this is only the second one I have read), but in what I have read I have found that you have a clear rhythm to your poetry that is just incredible. Keep on writing.

[Erica Corbitt]

word choice is kind of off the chain, bro. good stuff. (:

[Kimberly Smith]

I backlash a moment to conceive the constituency.
Ripping apart my open alliteration,
I hear the sounds, of a modern invasion.
Creation.(NICE)
nice poem loveeeee it

[Estrella]

wow I love this. You really do use interesting words wonderfully, this feels like some form of release for the subject of the poem.