For you.

For you.

With an eye for genuine wisdom,
I clutched your hand and lured you in.
Across an enchanted forest with impassable fog,
I made out your face and it was honest beauty.

You hymned my name through the soft coiled mist,
I replied with what I thought a memorable kiss.
Covered with impeccable virtue and confident style,
I rose to my feet and stared for a time.

With shivers and shocks from your mesmerising debris,
I fell into a dream where I strolled on the sea.
But still I searched for your dear vacant soul,
To uncover and save it was my only ambition.

You laughed and cried and never whispered goodbye,
It was a staggering day though full of passionate sighs.
Yet still in my mind I pondered the heavenly,
Your elegant figure succumbed to my imaginable finger.

I noticed you in a dream last night bordering confession,
Our eyes sealed with an everlasting obsession.
I had you then but now I cease to ask for reality,
Was it I you adored, or the company we implored?

Chris Holmberg.

Reviews

[Sam Severn]

This has an ancient, old-timey mystical n' mythical feel like it's been carved in rock by children on a remote mountain top....My favorite verse is the 4th, n' the mysterious image you paint of "my imaginable finger"....You rocked me like a lyric from Led Zeppelin IV. Your words ring like a guitar, n' "For You" hit me like the hammer of the gods. ㋡

[Cherrie]

I sent it to soon/ this was a enchanting poem with a fairytale feel to it :)

[Cherrie]

enchanting a poem fairytale

[Jen]

beautiful.

[Ruth]

Beautiful! Sometimes its a hard task to wonder if the person we think we can save or get to know is ever going to confess to what they feel or hide inside!
This is moving, do we lose ourselves by living in the moment or get swamped with detail, hard one!
xx

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

You are a natural born romantic. Very nice!

[TTBoy28]

Wow! What a powerful finger that must have been! "Was it I you adored, or the company we implored?" - Awesome line here!
I get so many meanings from this write. Thank you, Chris!

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has a strong classic feel (which I love)..simply beautiful work

[Doreen]

These two lines seemed a bit cumbersome:

Yet still in my mind I pondered the heavenly,
Your elegant figure succumbed to my imaginable finger.

Other than that, I loved this piece. It flows well and I like the imagery. A very nice write.

[KellieJeanne]

This is unbelievable, so touching. It has such a kiss of reality at the end. I love it