Heaven

A rare girls night out.

It was just the two of us,

her innocent face framed by blue, blonde and brown

turned upward with a freckled grin,

elated to be an only child

even if just for an evening.

We sang to our favorite song,

a melody of highs and lows,

humming the words we didn’t know

and belting out the ones we did.

I took the long way home

down the country road,

allowing the spell to remain

unbroken.

The sky was a spattering of clouds

that took the remnants of the setting orange sun

and turned them into pink, purple, grey.

And she turned to me

and said that it was times like this

that she could see Heaven.

In that moment

so could I.

Reviews

[Yvette Shaw]

I had to take a deep breath after reading this. Those beautiful moments that we
share...You captured it perfectly. Well done.

Yvette

[Belinda Rice]

what a great work of art here, congrads on writing a wonderful loveing piece ty so much for sharing this with me i really liked it alot....

[Windy]

How absolutly beautiful. How amazing that a child can see things in such different lights as we and what a blessing. wonderful write, full of love and feeling. great flow delightful imagery. congrats. ;)

[Forest Green]

My....what a gem...excellent.

Compact, effusive, sizzling with emotion. A true delight to read...!

Nice work...

Daniel

[Angel's Lady]

How wonderful. Well, if you were trying to touch hearts, you succeeded with mine. Very beautifully written. Great job.

[AK]

Kids love so easily... sometimes it reminds us to let our guard down. My grand-daughter does that for me. Everytime she squeals "Poppie" as she runs across the room to give me a hug. Whew... to be that innocent and trusting again...

Your piece was beautifully written by the way!

[Mistral Bilgera]

this is a very heartfelt write! touching and endearing, and surrounded by such gentle simple happiness...
a good friendship, and wonderful nature will indeed give you a taste of heaven :)

thanks for sharing!

[J. Araujo]

i don't usually review poems, i rarely find ones that i like on writerscafe but this one is touching and evocative, not at all cliche. With the words you use its easy for me to imagine how perfect the image your setting must feel, i almost want you to go on with the description so it doesn't end.