Yes, you can.

In essence I am living in a

Chasm of God’s playing field,

And it is He who pulls my strings,

Not myself as I would love to believe.

To the naked eye I am but a mere player,

Doting on a power greater than me.

Of course, I fail when I break free,

Trying to hold myself up against gravity.

How foolish am I to think I am strong.

It is still so tempting to rebel against what’s right.

Somehow it’s inevitable that I must cry out for help.

Author's Note

Read the poem. Read the hidden message. Then read the title.

Reviews

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Geez . . . and I thought it was just me who felt this way :) You have portrayed the "tug of war" perfectly in these small amount of words. I get where you are coming from. Sometimes we try so hard to be the masters of our own universe that we forget who really rules.

A thought provoking and very touching write, friend!

[Lorraine]

Very witty. It has a lovely form and an inspiring message. Thanks for sharing for this. I, however, would like to think that I really can't rebel against Him who is the greatest.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Antonio Valentino]

Yesterday is gone, focus on today because
Everything happens for a reason, plus
Strength comes from deep inside and
You should be proud of yourself
Only you can allow negative things
Unless you just give up which I don't think you
Can you have to much going for yourself
And plus so many care for you and yours
Nothing will stop you because, yes you can

[Murphy]

Whoa! I missed the acrostic on the first read! Very creative... I like how you express yourself in this piece... a fine portrayal of an internal struggle. In the sequence in which you recommend reading it, per 'Author's Note', it can still be taken 2 different ways. I enjoyed this... very thought provoking. Thanks for sharing! :)

[AK]

Indeed you can!!!
Very creative piece I might add. Thanks to Jill for sending it my way!

[Mistral Bilgera]

Very good acrostic! very inspiring!
the last four lines (the THIS part) are my favorites!

good writing! :)

[J]

Oh yes. You are so very clever . . . and yeah, you can, but only with Him. I do wish I could tell you of the affinity I share with you . . . the insistance on doing it "my way" [as though I knew better] ~ that if I just closed my eyes, He would not notice my own self-serving decision to stray . . . and how very painful that decision always is.

You are an amazing writer.

j

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We all need help throughout our lives, and yes we can survive and carry on as long as we understand the forces which cause the effects in our lives. A thought provoking acrostic between the title and the body of the poem. Thank you for sharing