Her Heart Fell to the Ground

The complicated triangle of hurt.

 Her heart fell to the ground in front of you
And you swiftly walked around it,
Sidestepping carefully so as not to step on it,
          Yet breaking it to pieces as you avoid it.
And you come to me with a shaking head,
          Marveling at a woman’s flaw
                     for having a heart.
And I shake my head with you
As I quickly hide my own breaking heart
                     behind my back.

And it took me time to realize
That a woman is not imperfect 
                     for having a heart,
Or even that our hearts break easily.
But our flaw lies in how carelessly
We give them away,
          And how easily she gave you hers,
                     And how easily I gave you mine,
And how I even forgot to tell you
I was giving you my heart
                     As you swiftly walked around it.

And now I see you,
          Dropping your heart at the feet of another,
                    Watching it shatter as she walks around it,
                              Sidestepping carefully so as not to step on it,
And not even noticing as you pick up the pieces 
And follow her still with your broken offering.
I guess I’m trying to tell you
                    I know how you feel.

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

Whew... that took a little breath out of me. It was like I was your shadow as I witnessed a big part of your life unfold before my eyes. Such courage it takes to reveal our most innermost secrets, but it is in that same strength, that we learn to put it past us, and hopefully, move on. Sorry you know that feeling. I do too, and it's a pain not easy expressed with words. Enjoying your talent Autumn. Looking forward for more.

Antonio

[Cliff Rhodes]

Hello Autumn's Child,
This is a beautiful feeling piece and makes emotions part of a complicated experience of growing and being shattered and putting it all back together again, almost new. I think it happens to everyone. Thanks for posting. Cliff

[Rambling Prose]

What a beautiful write! You nailed it quite effectively & I felt every piece of that shattered heart. What better way to say "I know how you feel?"...I love the progression is constant & the flow steady. The format really is really pleasing to the eye.

Excellent writing!!!!

[Yvette Shaw]

The best learnings sometimes come only after having experinced
the pain yourself. Sadly it usually takes several times. Well written...

Yvette Shaw

[HPsGurl1]

Wow! I am . . . . . . . . . . Speechless! This was, for me, very emotional. I always write poetry like this, but never on paper, I try to imprint my work in my heart 'cause I am afraid I will lose it . . . . . . . . . . Amazing!

[Antony]

This is absolutely wonderful writing in all that it means. What goes around, comes around, that is what I read in this. I liked the format you use as it flows perfectly on the page. To avoid the affairs of the heart, seems to be an easy way out of a relationship, until it is their heart that is being avoided. I liked this very much.
Antony