Battle

Something I wrote when I going through a rough patch in my relationship. It is about the end of the relationship.

The smoke clears and we begin to gather what is left of ourselves. 

I abandon my tears as I reach for my mask.

I rise proud and strong, facing the truth of our defeat.

My cold face hard against the wind.

My insides shake like dead leaves caught in a fall storm. 

My cheeks still stained with the blood of fallen soldiers. 

How can I say not to cry?

How can I claim it will be alright? 

That we may have lost the battle, but we have not lost the war? 

The weight of blame sits heavy upon my shoulders forcing my knees back to the ground. 

I can feel the first cool raindrops dance on the back of my hanging head.

I let my tears become one with the rain.

Tomorrow, I will be brave.

Tomorrow, it will be alright.

Tomorrow, I will throw away my shield and beg him to stay. 

Author's Note

This is my first run at posting something I created. All feedback is appreciated!

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Loved the honest feeling in this piece the feeling of love and heartache that will be in most everyones life Best wishes with your future poetry and may the good words come to you easily as you ponder new pages of poetry.

[Inject Positivity]

Brilliantly done.....The poem speaks of your heart very strongly....Emotionally catchy write.....Very well thought out and thought provoking to the reader.....Full ratings mate!!!!

[Cheyenne]

Thanks! I definitely poured my heart into this one.

[Sarah Vaenn]

I find this very clean and thoughtful. Though the story is full of dolor :)

[Cheyenne]

Yeah this one is really sad, it was a really tough time in my life. I was in love with someone that I just couldn't to make it work with and we would get to edge of breaking up and then I would realize how much I cared and I would try to fix it and I couldn't. Eventually it was too much and he let go. I was left wishing I could have made him stay.

[Ebrar]

I let my tears become one with the rain.
Tomorrow, I will be brave.
Tomorrow, it will be alright.
Tomorrow, I will throw away my shield and beg him to stay.

" These line made me cry lord swear, i feel it. Please keep posting such works. I am in love with your writs! Bravo Lady :)

[Cheyenne]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate the positive feedback :)

[terry smith]

wow ...this is awesome....love your style....

[Cheyenne]

Thank you :) This one is something I wrote last year but I always liked it because of the war analogy