A Beauty Contest

A short poem about the truth in beauty.

 She was a gorgeous azure color

Bright as others were duller

She was ready for the contest.

 

This was no ordinary duel of the fur

It was the for the best, you see kind sir

It’s the city’s Beauty Contest!

 

There was a fire dressed model, prideful and pretty

A fairy couture one as well, cute as a kitty

But the azure beauty sat alone with a smile.

 

She only slightly wanted to win

As she sat among her kin

Karina was here only to have fun.

 

Just before her call, they came

The fire and fairy dame

All ready to mock her

 

Karina didn’t believe their rants

And waited to go where the audience chants

And felt quite proud of herself.

 

She won, to the others despite

But a plan bloomed in their spite

To embarrass poor Karina

 

They shoved her in a muddy pool

Just to make her look like a fool

And they laughed.

 

Just one last detail left to tell,

Even thought Karina fell,

The others were covered in mud.

Reviews

[Vertu Rose]

The last stanza is elegantly written. But to give good feedback I'd tell you that, It was hard for me to tell which tense you were using. There was a mix past and present tense.

For example:
"Karina didn't believe their rants

And was call(ed)? to the stage where the audience chant(ed)?

And felt quite proud of herself."

Something like that can be easily fixed. But you are the writer and therefore you know exactly what you were trying to say, and what you wanted the final piece to be so, in that case you can do what you wish.

[Y.F.]

A teen drama meets poetic justice - interesting... :)
The flow on this piece wasn't at all what I expected, and I had to read it several times to try and get a clue at what you were getting at, but that's not necessarily a bad thing.

"Just one last detail left to tell,
Even thought Karina fell,
The others were covered in mud."

^ My favorite stanza, as it transforms the entire poem into something more than just a story about a beauty pageant, and gives it more depth.

"Bright as others where duller" - I think you've meant 'were'.

Overall it seams like you were set out to write a story, not a poem, and somehow with a little makeup made of rhymes and form you've made it into a poem.
I think it could've been better if some of the things were rather implied than said, as poetry tends to be less direct, and to leave gaps for the reader to fill out.
Still, pretty decent. :)