Ah... You claim the metaphors and even index them for the reader. Interesting use of metaphors.
You talk about the actions of the waves, tides, rock, body, light... Then you explain what each part means to you.
Nothing overly cryptic here and broadly relatable.
A very enjoyable read.
Yes I know I didn't leave much to the imagination. Maybe I explained too much and made it simplistic.. read moreYes I know I didn't leave much to the imagination. Maybe I explained too much and made it simplistic but it felt right to do so. I wanted to make my message clear and let my light shine out for anyone who may read it to see and understand.
8 Years Ago
I have no critisism at all. In think it fits well with your title and intention. I tend to write in .. read moreI have no critisism at all. In think it fits well with your title and intention. I tend to write in shades and innuendo, but this is not better or worse, right or wrong. I wouldn't change a thing.
Good work.
Ah... You claim the metaphors and even index them for the reader. Interesting use of metaphors.
You talk about the actions of the waves, tides, rock, body, light... Then you explain what each part means to you.
Nothing overly cryptic here and broadly relatable.
A very enjoyable read.
Yes I know I didn't leave much to the imagination. Maybe I explained too much and made it simplistic.. read moreYes I know I didn't leave much to the imagination. Maybe I explained too much and made it simplistic but it felt right to do so. I wanted to make my message clear and let my light shine out for anyone who may read it to see and understand.
8 Years Ago
I have no critisism at all. In think it fits well with your title and intention. I tend to write in .. read moreI have no critisism at all. In think it fits well with your title and intention. I tend to write in shades and innuendo, but this is not better or worse, right or wrong. I wouldn't change a thing.
Good work.
I dont even know what to say..
but i wanted you to know that i like this so much and im adding it to my favorites:)
Thank you for sharing this truly amazing poem!:)
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Oh thank you so much Tee! I'm glad you liked it. :-)