The Shuttered Light

The Shuttered Light

A Poem by Firebird
"

I am the light within.

"
I am the witness,
The watcher within,
Shuttered light 
On my rock
In a restless sea.
Waves batter and break,
Relentlessly pounding,
Tides tug and surge,
My body is drowning.
My thoughts are the tides,
And my feelings the waves,
Time takes my rock,
And my body decays.
Yet I am the witness,
The watcher within,
My light it shines forth now,
Refusing to dim.

© 2015 Firebird


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Ah... You claim the metaphors and even index them for the reader. Interesting use of metaphors.
You talk about the actions of the waves, tides, rock, body, light... Then you explain what each part means to you.
Nothing overly cryptic here and broadly relatable.
A very enjoyable read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Yes I know I didn't leave much to the imagination. Maybe I explained too much and made it simplistic.. read more
 David Scott

8 Years Ago

I have no critisism at all. In think it fits well with your title and intention. I tend to write in .. read more
Firebird

8 Years Ago

Thank you :-)



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A wonderful metaphor here. I saw that lighthouse in a turbulent sea take a battering. I also saw a lesson in resilience. Very nice work.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


Firebird

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and for your kind comment Chris
Interesting use of metaphors I think you are in for a rough ride! The sea can be brutal! A nice poem Firebird! loved the imagery!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading it Andrew. I'm glad you liked it :-)
Boy is that a vision of my mind also. Standing on the outside looking in sometimes. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

I hope the view is good. Thank you Willard. Take care of yourself x
May you always shine so bright my friend.
A beacon for us all.
Z.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Oh! Thank you Z :-)
Zugzwang

8 Years Ago

You're welcome 😊
This poem is pretty nice, it's straightforward and simple, but written with genuine feeling. I enjoyed it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Thank you Josiah! :-) I'm glad you liked it.
-inactive now-

8 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Ah... You claim the metaphors and even index them for the reader. Interesting use of metaphors.
You talk about the actions of the waves, tides, rock, body, light... Then you explain what each part means to you.
Nothing overly cryptic here and broadly relatable.
A very enjoyable read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Yes I know I didn't leave much to the imagination. Maybe I explained too much and made it simplistic.. read more
 David Scott

8 Years Ago

I have no critisism at all. In think it fits well with your title and intention. I tend to write in .. read more
Firebird

8 Years Ago

Thank you :-)
we are much more than physical bodies...we are the light within...the heart, the soul of being human...

really like this intent...

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob :-) I'm really glad you like it.
Beautifully flowing words, with a hauntingly lovely voice whispering the words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Thank you for that lovely review. You make my day :-)
alifeacoustic

8 Years Ago

You are very welcome
I dont even know what to say..
but i wanted you to know that i like this so much and im adding it to my favorites:)
Thank you for sharing this truly amazing poem!:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Firebird

8 Years Ago

Oh thank you so much Tee! I'm glad you liked it. :-)

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