Really good for a first poem, I got the image of a bird bursting free from a dark cocoon in a blaze of fire, ...a phoenix.
It is astounding when we can free ourselves of negative thoughts and feelings that chain us down.
Wonderful, nice form. I liked it :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Thank you! I wrote all my poems here in the last three months of 2015. I haven't written any this ye.. read moreThank you! I wrote all my poems here in the last three months of 2015. I haven't written any this year :-/
8 Years Ago
I'm sure you'll come up with something great soon enough :)
HEY! I REALLY LIKE IT. THE WAY I PERCEIVE IS THAT THE WORLD FOR THAT PERSON IS COLD BUT HE IS A GOOD PERSON AND SO HE GETS LOST INTO HIS FANTASIES , WHICH HAPPENS A LOT TO ME BTW.
Really good for a first poem, I got the image of a bird bursting free from a dark cocoon in a blaze of fire, ...a phoenix.
It is astounding when we can free ourselves of negative thoughts and feelings that chain us down.
Wonderful, nice form. I liked it :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you! I wrote all my poems here in the last three months of 2015. I haven't written any this ye.. read moreThank you! I wrote all my poems here in the last three months of 2015. I haven't written any this year :-/
8 Years Ago
I'm sure you'll come up with something great soon enough :)
it's hard to become a butterfly again when we have been hurt so often that we wrap ourselves in a cocoon of self-protection...
nicely expressed...
j.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thanks j I wrote this poem a while ago now. It doesn't feel so cold outside now despite the fact it'.. read moreThanks j I wrote this poem a while ago now. It doesn't feel so cold outside now despite the fact it's winter. :-)
almost a phoenix rising well from the ashes of your mind. such lovely descriptions and personality in your writing...was taken with you. its not easy to stay in your own head, the thoughts build and build...but equally so, it isn't easy to rise once you have been waiting there keeping yourself from the cold. This was pointed and sure didn't need to be any longer.
Love when no words are wasted.
Coming back...
Very nice!
Great flow, rhyme and content!!!
If the last word of the third line of the second stanza would read "higher", it would would yield a double rhyme with "fire"... just saying... ;-))