LOOK DEEP

When you look at me you see the crazy, out going, hard worker and so on

You see a person who is enjoying life

You see someone who has a bright future ahead of him

There is more to that then what meets the eyes

Look really deep into my eyes

Look really deep you will see someone that has had to struggle

Someone that things haven't not come to

Someone who has been told they there were going to be nothing

That was going to be worthless and not successful in life

Just going to be a loser and waste of space

Someone who was picked on through out their education career

That was never given a chance to be show people who they really were

A person who loved school but hated going

Look really deep and you will see something else

Reviews

[Addy]

Good message :) good job :D

[Justin]

thanks :) i felt i had to write it, hope people are able to identify with it :)

[Ashley Camden]

Wow! I totally identify with that. If you read my stuff you will get to see what I went through to a degree. This was awesome, like a declaration to yourself and others that they are wrong and will have to hold their tongues. I write like that too.

[Justin]

thanks for commenting on it, it is awesome how we both can identify with it :)

[Ashley Camden]

That is the great thing about online writing.

[Justin]

your welcome, you can post a piece of writing and have people able to identify with it :)

[Matching Socks]

A great message in this poem. I liked it Justin. Well done!
And I can relate. : )

[Justin]

thanks :) that is awesome how you can relate to it too :)

[Matching Socks]

The force is strong in you my young padawan. 😉
That's why you've survived the BS. Keep up the good work.

[Justin]

thanks, all i can do is my best :)

[Matching Socks]

That's the spirit!

[Justin]

yup we have something in common :)

[Girl With A Pen]

A very interesting poem. Tells a lot about looking within. I do see one error though in the second stanza. "Someone that things haven't not come to" You can just get rid of "Not". Other then that, wonderful poem :)

[Justin]

thanks for commenting on it :) :) it was my first poem i have published :)