Undressed

a pitcher of sunshine
pours through undressed
window glass
a pure liquid gold
to pool on white sheets
crumpled in disarray
drenching exposed toes
kissing ankles
to settle on veiled thighs
how warm starts my day

Reviews

[Daz]

Great poem. Alluring and warm to the senses. I like that line... 'drenching exposed toes and kissing ankles...'

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Daz. I appreciate your visit. All good wishes.

Chris

[LisaCarol]

Hi Chris - this was very sensual and beautiful. Thank you for sharing your writing.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear LisaCarol, thank you so much for stopping by and leaving me such a positive review. All good wishes.

Chris

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Please, forgive me, reread, I love the moment, and I definately, love and eagerly betoken, the await of sunshine, well, even the dubious moment of darkness, great write! ---Maynard

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Maynard. Always a pleasure having a visit from you. Hope all is good in your world. All the best.

Chris

[1809 Black Plague December]

Oh wow, many thanks Chris. My b-day today. :)
I'm having a hardball of a day. But thank you, very kind of you, and I do enjoy your work, always, avidly---Maynard

[Costa Siwale]

Short, sweet, vivid
Just the way I like them!
Thank you!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your kind thoughts Costa. Pleased you stopped by. All the best.

Chris

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

I love fingers, toes, especiallly when it flows within the pool or webbing shore, great write! ---Maynard

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you again Maynard. Hope life is being kind to you. I appreciate your thoughts.

Chris

[Dave]

Chris - you surprised me with this somewhat sultry erotic piece. It leaves one to imagine whatr had just happened before. Thank you for the very pleasant surprise. Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Dave. Pleased you enjoyed this short poem. Good to try something different now and then. Hope life is being kind to you and yours. All the best.

Chris

[Glen Weimann]

There's a super sensory feel to this, and I enjoyed it a lot. It flows, just like the liquid sun it talks of, and I have a couple of suggestions for accentuating the flow and liquidity even more. First, kissing and settling are not especially liquid verbs. They work well, but had you considered alternatives? Second, I love the way the economy of the poem helps maintain or assist or even create the flow, and I can imagine a slow voiceover reading it over suitable footage; and in that regard I personally might drop 'glass' on the 3rd line. But all that aside, it's a lovely read, and thanks for posting. BRs 'Glen'

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Glen fur such a positive review and for the suggestions you have made. Much appreciated. All good wishes and I appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[Michael Sun Bear]

“Undressed window glass” I like that! Your poem is elegant in its simplicity. I feel as if, just as you were waking up, someone snapped a quick photo from the doorway. As usual, your imagery is strong.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you my friend. Your thoughts always valued and much appreciated. I have been having a bit of a break from poetry. The outside world taking over. All good wishes.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

Pour me a sunshine
Awake my sleepy eyes
Cancel my worries
A new day has arrived
Opportunities abound
No limits for chances
Make the most of all

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Sami. Know you are appreciated. All good wishes sent your way.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome Chris.

[Soren]

Poetic is the word and the metaphors just keep on pouring out. Most wonderful images you paint Chris in this delightful bright poem of the opening of day. Lovely

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Soren for your lovely review. Your thoughts much appreciated and valued. All good wishes.

Chris