Fragile

brown eyed girl
warm chocolate melting
soft curl a fountain
tickles on her left ear
a tumble of summer cornfield
half smile from a white cotton pillow
sheet turned down
three days in
how long this piece of string
blue curtains tremble
roller coaster heartbeat
another day passes
pawns in waiting
breathe a sigh of relief
half baked peace
family ghosts whisper

Reviews

[D. Mansfield]

The anxiety of a young girl or young woman, having some courtship issues. Kind of hazy like a dream, but the anxiety comes through strongest. Interesting poem.

[Chris Shaw]

I appreciate your thoughts here Danny. Many thanks.

Chris

[Red Brick Keshner]

This wonderful poem captures delicate and precious moments with vivid imagery. The warmth, softness, and fleeting nature of time are beautifully expressed. Your words convey both the tenderness and the underlying anxiety of the moment. Keep writing—your ability to evoke emotions is truly special. Happy new year, Chris!
Freds

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Freds for your warm encouragement. Tenderness and anxiety, sum this poem up beautifully. It was a worrying few days.

Chris

[Red Brick Keshner]

If only poems could shoo worries away! We’ve quite a few here 🕊🙏🏻

[poetgurl]

This is amazing Chris, I love the imagery in this write.
very captivating.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. Pleased you enjoyed my thoughts. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Chris... we had Brown eyes in our family, especially my Father's side... they were born in Hungary and spoke Hungarian; however, their last name was Pantili which is surely Italian... no records discovered of Italian Heritage. My Mother was part American Indian and part Irish... covered in Blessings... Amen

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Pat. I am the only one in my family who doesn’t have brown eyes. They say brown dominates. Your heritage is interesting. All good wishes.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

Thank you Chris... My Father never taught me Hungarian; however I know the sound of the language reminds me of a Red headed Woodpecker "knocking on our Maple Treeinthe Early Spring.... which I prefer... gently, Pat

[Trace]

Very interesting snippets of thought, each feeding into the other.
Enjoyed each one.

Trace

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Trace. I appreciate your thoughts. All good wishes.

Chris

[Cherrie]

The heart and love of a girl is fragile
And your dreamscape lifts the veil.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Cherrie fur sharing your thoughts. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous imagery. Each sentence is a painting.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Thomas. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Pete]

i am taken away and get lost in these words. terrific imagery that speaks to the heart and soul. what's not to like? great poetry - every line a gem. can't get much better than this. bravo!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Pete for your encouraging words. Pleased you enjoyed this poem. All the best.

read moreThank you Pete for your encouraging words. Pleased you enjoyed this poem. All the best.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Some great writer wrote. We dance on a edge of failure. Hoping to dance away from the broken glass fall. I liked the honesty of the words dear Chris. In a day. We can be tested. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. I appreciate your thoughts on this poem. Always good to have a visit from you and to benefit from your encouraging words.

Chris