Remnants

( I must stop watching horror films at night, this is what my muse gave me this morning)

dance on my heart dark darling
dance with your boots of black longing
dance till every drop
is drained and contaminated
with the dirt on the sole of
your loathing
dance as you have never danced before
dance with the remnants of ragged abuse
this time make sure the job is done
so the sun will set with gleeful satisfaction
so it won’t rise at daybreak
in the mourning

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Hello Chris
Being a lover of metaphors I read behind your lines … yes watching horror movies, etc. at night does prompt our early morning thoughts… this I know…
Very interesting read… loved it!
Lisa

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Lisa. Yes horror movies have a habit of resurrecting stuff. Pleased you appreciate the metaphor. I hope this week is kind to you. Have a great day 🌹

[red93]

Very interesting Chris, this yearning for darkness - but out of darkness always comes The Light. Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks so much Tony. I always appreciate your thoughtful reviews.

Chris

[Andrew John]

I'm feeling this dancing. And we get the dawning of the mourning in the morning. Some lovely thoughts, Chris, as so often. Thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Andrew always for your encouragement and support. Know you are appreciated.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

This dance is quite bitter...and quite dark.. please don't watch horror films the night before...it is well said, almost like punishment...much abuse noted too...get this evil out of you by dancing until you rid if it....
Well written dear Chris...
Warmly, B

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Betty for another review. Must aporeciated. 🌹

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometimes we need the darkness. Make us feel wild and free dear Chris. I did like the twist of words and thoughts. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you my friend for stopping by to review. Mist appreciated.

Chris

[AYVID N]

This poem had a feverish pace to it and a very palpable dark side. The dance is of hate and the speaker is bitter and knowing of the other half's abusive ways. The words drip with a sarcasm. Dear Chris, as always, you spin magic with your pen and pull the reader into this very intriguing scape. One wants to see more, learn more, read more....I loved this read!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Divya, a spontaneous write. You know it is amazing what, films and poetry can trigger. I don’t usually write on the dark side, but this one just spilled out. Not sure I am looking for repeat performances though:) Have a lovely day. We have beautiful weather at the marina today.

Chris 🌹

[poetgurl]

WOW! This is so amazing! Really well expressed emotions.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Plainly Meg. Pleased you stopped by. Happy Saturday.

Chris

[GlendaK]

Awesome. I love this and have felt this as most probably have at some point.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you GeeKay. We all have a dark side, mine doesn’t show that often. Pleased you stopped by to share your thoughts.

Chris

[Soren]

The word painting in this mural of horror is artistic with multiple metaphors.
"dance till every drop
is drained and contaminated
with the dirt on the sole of
your loathing"
Great lines.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Soren. The artist’s paint was a bit black here, though as always I appreciate your thoughtful review. Have a hapoy Monday.

Chris

[Neville]

if I told you just how good this was, I might just frit my self .. Neville :)

[Chris Shaw]

Well I scared myself when this poured out Neville. I don’t usually do darkness, but why not once in a while:) Thank you my friend.

Chris

[Neville]

you can beat an egg etc etc but you just can't beat a bit o noir now n again .. Neville
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you can beat an egg etc etc but you just can't beat a bit o noir now n again .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Your French needs brushing up my friend :)

[Neville]

mange tout ..