................. Ouch now aint that what they call a dubble whammy :)
Posted 3 Months Ago
3 Months Ago
Totally unrelated and the second refers to recent conflict overseas. An ouch is for stubbing your to.. read moreTotally unrelated and the second refers to recent conflict overseas. An ouch is for stubbing your toe. Good morning Neville and thank you.
Apathy, an emotion so bleak. The escape from the open window feels like abandonment.
Revenge, on the other hand, seems explosive and intense here.
Beautifully expressed, dear Chris!
This sounds like someone who has escaped prison and they are hell bent on revenge. Great words in this piece that creat vivid images and a story within the mind.
Posted 4 Months Ago
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4 Months Ago
Thank you PB. These were written separately quite a while back and were unrelated. I like that you h.. read moreThank you PB. These were written separately quite a while back and were unrelated. I like that you have tried to out a story to them.
Chris
4 Months Ago
Typically when I read I get a story and visualize them in my mind
This was really cool to read. I like the way the surreal descriptions impact the reader with such brevity. Well done. F.
Posted 4 Months Ago
4 Months Ago
Thanks Fabian, Going through my notebook I found these. Written some time ago. Thought they might be.. read moreThanks Fabian, Going through my notebook I found these. Written some time ago. Thought they might be worth posting. Pleased you appreciated my efforts. All the best.
I would like to share one story.
There was once daisy, turned to their desk top flower then to table top flower.
Once there was a season of thunder stroms which could blew off the timy petals.
So the mom and dad made a glass building not even the high speed wind can enter.
Now the daisy is safe in home where it can survive safely with him.
I just want to share one thing, enough is like limit, when exceeds the brim then it has to come out fall down. This may be desire or loose talk like knife which tries to hurt others. Within limits is safer for self and even if it exceeds it cant move or hurt others rather self destruction.
Jessy jacob,
With love hugs🫠🥰-
I liked this new way of writing clear, crisp and right at target.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..