Fish Out of Water

(Spontaneous write)

my socks are wet my mum will know
i’ve been where told I shouldn’t go
but water fascinates me so
those shallow beds of watercress
i can not help but paddle there
and then i wade in gurgling streams
a fish i am within my dreams
an older me now understands
why lakes and rivers not dry land
can reel me in oh yes they do
i am a Pisces through and through

Reviews

[keith]

ya let your guard down with this one ms chris
you sought and found the right words
without a single miss
seriously i like this write

'i’ve been where told I shouldn’t go'
i see you HA!

you got it goin on girl!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Keith. Pleased you stopped by for my inner child. Have yourself a good Saturday.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

I am an Aquarius and I love water as well. I guess it goes with being the water bearer.

Love this tale of a little you swimming without parental supervision because you snuck and done it

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks PB. Unusually this filtered thriugh in rhyme. My inner child came out to play. Pleased you enjoyed the read. Happy Saturday.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

I truly did enjoy this tale. I think as some point those of us who love water have snuck off and played in it during the summer.

I use to sneak down to the creek with a couple of my friends.

[Chris Shaw]

I never took a towel. I’d put dry socks on wet feet. My mum always knew :)

[Poetic Beauty]

We would come home all wet and muddy because it was a 15 min walk to the creek through the woods lol

[Neville]

I know it might sound or appear corny .. but this is a little gem & spontaneity clearly suites you Chris ..

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Ah, my inner child came out in the early hours. She was walking the streams by Fishery Inn at Boxmoor Common. Thank you Neville. Very concerned she was about her wet socks:)

Chris

[Neville]

how dreadful :)

N.

[Stu. T.H.]

The poem reflects the process of one's evaluation of one's life experiences and a sense of tranquillity that often can only be found during mid-day summer dreams. Only when time is ample, and lenient that one may enjoy the luxury of opportunity to indulge in the fantastical realities that evade the modern scope of mundane lifestyles. A spontaneous write, so fluent in both rhymes, wording, and ideas, is not so unlike streaming rivers baking their early harvests, abundant with life and emotional surges, it moved me slightly. Even before I recognised the feelings imbued within the poem, I felt my own stirring within me an undefined yet familiar, sensual temptation to go along with the ideas and dreams that I've long restrained by the requirements for an easy-going daily life. In crude senses, we feel the excitement before we feel hardships; In entertainment, we bring back the nostalgia of our hopes and whimsical dreams to reanimate them. Though such sentiments are foregone for some, most still open their eyes to sleep through our days in life, to dream beautiful dreams, how enticing.
Thank you for sharing your work, author Chris Shaw, I felt your passion synchronising with my own during the read, it's a wonderful write. Please have a good day.
- Leon

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Leon, thank you for your time and extensive review. Your thoughts are very much appreciated. I’m so pleased you found some value here. All the best.

Chris

[carl]

enjoyable read, captured the child fascination leading to adult inclination - good flow verse to verse - last line really closes it out nicely. Spontaneous writes can be rewarding - this one works very well. nice title -carl

[Chris Shaw]

So pleased you enjoyed this spontaneous write which came in the early hours Carl. I very much appreciate your visit and your shared thoughts. Enjoy the rest of Thursday.

Chris

[mabel mae]

eek! astronomy!!! this is so fun, brings me back to when i was a little babe. thank you chris. -mabel

[Chris Shaw]

Hello lovely Mabel. Pleased you found some fun here and I was able to connect with your inner child. I appreciate your visit.

Chris