Fish Out of Water

(Spontaneous write)

my socks are wet my mum will know
i’ve been where told I shouldn’t go
but water fascinates me so
those shallow beds of watercress
i can not help but paddle there
and then i wade in gurgling streams
a fish i am within my dreams
an older me now understands
why lakes and rivers not dry land
can reel me in oh yes they do
i am a Pisces through and through

Reviews

[Vol]

Chris,
I really love this poem! As a Floridian who grew up in the water, water, everywhere, Gulf of Mexico where I swam in dark water, and turquoise, too... surfing, fishing, splashing, wading, strolling... It was the best of times and now I live in the desert...

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Vol. No desert here. Plenty of water though for a Pisces:) My inner child came out to play when I wrote this. All good wishes.

Chris

[Vol]

There is something quite memorable about wet socks, for sure...

[light and ashes]

Thought this was really great, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much my friend. I appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[MCS]

This is brilliant and enjoyed. I'm not Pisces but I get the attraction to open water.

[Chris Shaw]

I love the water Mary. Thank you so much for your kind words.

Chris

[Dylan Macadham]

... Looking for something to cheer me up, I found this gem :)
A beautiful reminder that our Inner Kid can bring us comfort. ... For me it was exploring the woods, eating wild berries, climbing trees, all with my dog Tippy. ...actually, he waited patiently on the ground🙂

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dylan. Yes it’s nice to let that inner child out now and again. Good to hear about yours. Pleased you enjoyed this poem. Enjoy the rest of the day.

Chris

[Dylan Macadham]

... and you, your evening, Chris,
It's getting close to my bedtime where you are :)

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

in this short verse we explore memory, belonging, and identity in such an endearing way. i like the spontanaeity of this, the way thoughts bump into each other like domino pieces and the final picture is of you. the final couplet was so euphonic, it really rolls off the tongue and there's a bit of cheekiness to it, which i adore. i dont mind at all reading more works like this.

[Chris Shaw]

Your review is lovely Ern. Thank you so much for leaving me your thoughts. Much appreciated.

Chris

[red93]

Fabulous Chris - Pisceans unite and take over. Such an interesting piece on so many levels. Really Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tony. Pleased you enjoyed this old poem. All good wishes.

Chris

[Weeping willow]

Love these words, I also love the water. So I understand these words of yours, beautifully spoken ;-}

[Chris Shaw]

Weeping willow, I thank you for stopping by to review this inner child poem. She does like to come out to play now and again. Have a lovely Sunday.

Chris

[Weeping willow]

Thank you Chris and sorry I have not been on here very much lately. I you are well ;-] You are welcome always like your poems.

[Chris Shaw]

You are missed when away, but that makes it even more special when you return. I am good, hope all is well with you 🌹

[Mauricio Montoya]

Love this but I'm a twin born in may I hate dogs but love cats in a man's world I'm a fish out of water but I'm a man and like all we do get drunk and hair of the dog we do need water when we become wild cats. lol thank you for sharing.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mauricio thank you for sharing your delightful thoughts after reviewing my poem. Always a
read moreDear Mauricio thank you for sharing your delightful thoughts after reviewing my poem. Always a
having a visit from you.

Chris

[Mauricio Montoya]

You're welcome for a read I enjoyed

[Amy R]

What a lovely little escape in the waters.
How I love that., I am a Pisces too, I don't go to far in the deep but I love water regardless.

"a fish i am within my dreams" This is so me... 🤍🤍🙏🏻 Great write!!
-Amy

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Amy. I appreciate your kind words. From one Pisces to another.

Chris

[Amy R]

Aww, you're welcome.

[Victor D. Lopez]

Love the rhyme, and the word paintings of the simple joys of youth. It reminds me one of my favorite poems from my absolute favorite poet, William Wordsworth:

"My heart leaps up when I behold
A rainbow in the sky:
So was it when my life began;
So is it now I am a man;
So be it when I shall grow old,
Or let me die!
The Child is father of the Man;
And I could wish my days to be
Bound each to each by natural piety."

And, of course, mothers always know EVERYTHING. God bless them all. You are a breath of fresh air, Chris. Thank you for brightening my day as always.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Victor. Happy Saturday. Thank you so much for all your encouragement and for sharing Wordsworth. I also rate him highly. Yes mums know everything and when I became one myself I learned very quickly.

Chris