The Colour of Void

what is this void
that plagues me so
an empty ache
that won’t let go

with age comes loss
too many gone
i’ve lost the base notes
from my song

and yet what’s missing
builds in strength
in width in depth
and also length

in truth i guess
i grieve for me
that golden leaf fall
from my tree

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

Life's losses mount as we age, and each leaves its mark upon us. We know we too will someday join the ranks of the fallen, and despite whatever beliefs we might espouse, the mystery of death causes us to view it as a void. On the other hand, we know consciousness is energy, which knows only change, not emptiness.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate what you have left here.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Really nice rhyme scheme with some slant rhyme thrown in for good measure...
And I sure can relate to the second stanza...way too much.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks dear J, I am in good company then with stanza two. I appreciate you.

Chris

[Masked writer]

oh wow, beautiful

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Masked writer for stopping by. I appreciate you.

Chris

[Stu. T.H.]

With age, come more birthday candles, more pages of diary written, more miles walked -- But also with age, come less space to place candles, fewer blank pages to fill in, and fewer places to explore.
Though, we must remember that miracles do exist in life. To trade verses, I'd say, "Moments before a yellow leaf depart from its tree, it turns golden, and become another's", the moments we spent in life will be engraved into the memories of our companions and the world itself will remember. If one has life sorrow untended, confess -- to thyself, and the world will heed thee.

I cannot say I'm so well-acquainted with the pending feelings of unyielding reminders of my own mortality as others or my elders endure, but I also cannot say the work is not relatable for myself either. Still, wonderfully woven verses with sorrow tied to each of its line being anchors, author Chris Shaw.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts here Stu. I appreciate the comment you have left. All the best.

Chris

[Arundass TP]

A hurting poem for me too. Old age comes for what?

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Arundass. I appreciate your thoughts. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[Starbaby]

This is lovely Chris. Sad, wistful and melancholy all rolled up neatly into a well crafted poem of life and loss. You say very much in few words.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Starbaby for your kind and thoughtful review. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[Ken Simm.]

Excellent flow, topic, composition and all else. I can really empathise with this as well.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Ken for sharing your thoughts and for your kind visit. All the best.

Chris

[Matthew Kult]

A sadness comes from this write. We lose so many over time and there are many to grieve. Like leaves falling off our tree. Fantastic write.

With love

Matthew

[Chris Shaw]

You are spot on with your thoughts here Matthew. With age comes more grief. Thank you so much for stopping by.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

The sadness of Autumn as we know... there may be snow.
We become weak and tired enough to sigh. " I've lost the base notes to my song ". Whispering Wings will carry my song. gently, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts. The ghosts of my dearly loved departed are making their presence known. Hope your weekend has been restful and peaceful dear Pat. Your visits very much appreciated. Sending love across the waves.

Chris