The Colour of Void

what is this void
that plagues me so
an empty ache
that won’t let go

with age comes loss
too many gone
i’ve lost the base notes
from my song

and yet what’s missing
builds in strength
in width in depth
and also length

in truth i guess
i grieve for me
that golden leaf fall
from my tree

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

Growing older is filled with much loss. Loss of friends, family, ability to do things that once were possible. It is difficult and definitely trying at times.

There are blessings as we grow older too. We have experienced things, we grow in wisdom and depending sometimes new adventure come about.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you PB. I appreciate your thoughts on The Colour of Void. Growing older can bring losses, but there are gains to be had too. Have a great Tuesday.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

You have a great day too Chris. I love your poetry because it has a story to tell and it is real in emotion.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. That means alot :)

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome!!

[Victor D. Lopez]

Another painfully poignant, relatable write. The second stanza is for me the most powerful. Loss of loved ones, of the vitality and endless possibilities of youth do indeed tale away the base notes from our song, and in time the high and middle notes also become muted until we may perhaps only hear a single string instrument in what was once an orchestra. So much can be said in very few lines in skilled hands like yours.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Victor. I appreciate your thoughtful review. Have a great Tuesday.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

You should interact with me more informally.

Awesome work by the way.

I wish more people would write about things like this.

It's dark at the end. No one can hide from it.

[Chris Shaw]

Your words about my writing are much appreciated. Thank you for stopping by.

Chris

[Thomas W Case]

Beautiful. Powerful work.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Thomas for your review. Appreciated.

Chris

[andrew mitchell]

Isn’t incredible how our minds remain youthful but the vessel that carries us is failing. Unless one is unlucky with dementia. Nice rhymes Chris, worked well. If only time would slow down so we can enjoy our lives more fully. No respect I tell you!😉
.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Andrew. Yes, life travels at speed:) It needs to slow down. Have a good day.

Chris

[Vol]

Chris,
Oh, man! The strength of my delusion that I remain the same is so powerful, that right there, smack in the face of my seventy-four years staring back at me from my mirror, I am still eighteen and in search of trouble. I found it more than once, let me tell you!
Now I'll just turn and walk away, kicking all these leaves out of my path as I go...
Vol

[Chris Shaw]

You know, I wish I was delusional. I have long given up looking in mirrors to find that the hippie chick is no longer there. That’s not to say I don’t enjoy life. I do, but with age come losses, and they are mounting up and they are heavy. I think I can hear you singing Frank. I did it my way :) Many thanks Vol for stopping by.

Chris

[Vol]

Chris...
Yu know! It is easy to be afraid when the losses are so great! All the most important people in my life are dead, now, and I weep when some small reminder slaps my face, but today is still here to be dealt with... May I recommend a movie that has a scientific explanation for how we feed our feelings? It is called "What the Bleep do WE know?" An amazing movie, old as it is, but cool .

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Vol. Will try to find it. Have a good Christmas.

[NormaZ]

Great poem Chris, I loved the image of the base notes, and the golden leaf. Reading it made me feel the empty sadness that comes with loss.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Norma. I appreciate you. All good wishes.

Chris

[W. Barrett Munn]

I feel your pain. I keep trying to continue reading but the candle is short and flickering

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Winston. Your visits are very much appreciated.

Chris

[Nyx Untamed]

It's funny isn't it we lose the base bass notes and probably a few of the highs too..
Stuck with a 24 hrs guitar 🎸 solo in the mids. I like the oriental attitude at 60 the Chinese horoscope has gone full cycle. A new life new interests. Not a loss just learning a new song

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for reading this poem and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate you.

Chris

[Neville]

Yet to many, I have no doubt whatsoever, you shall always be golden .. beautiful & so very well poemed .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

Your response is lovely Neville and I thank you kindly for it. Pleased you found beauty in these words.

Chris

[Neville]

.............................. 🌻