The secrets that the wind can know dear Chris.
"I am scatters
of diamond dust gleaming
created by the gift of sun
a dance of sporadic sparkles
spangling river ripples"
I adored the above lines. Good morning from Michigan and thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote
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1 Year Ago
Thank you for your warm encouragement Coyote. I appreciate you and your visit. Have a good day. read moreThank you for your warm encouragement Coyote. I appreciate you and your visit. Have a good day.
Oh that last stanza speaks to me! The poem flows so nicely in beautiful description. Then the repetition towards the end leading up to the profound final words.
It was a wonderful read!
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Many thank yous Fallon for an encouraging review. Have a good Tuesday.
It was not hard to find myself going along with the gentle flow here Chris .. it would have been an awful lot harder to try and resist it .. excellent poetry my friend .. Neville
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1 Year Ago
Many thanks Neville for such a warm review. Have a great Tuesday.
Each verse shows some facet of the action of the wind except the last one, which incongruously repeats the statement that the wind is a distraction from a "waring" (Did you mean "warring"?) world of broken hearts. Given the events of the last week, this makes perfect sense.
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Many thanks John, especially for the spelling correction. I appreciate you. Have a good Tuesday. read moreMany thanks John, especially for the spelling correction. I appreciate you. Have a good Tuesday.
“I am a distraction
from a waring world
of broken hearts”
Dear Chris, your poem moves, breathes and lives palpably… the images, the verses individually introduced and finitely brush-stroked, the flow and dramatic repetition, the heartbreak and inspiration of it- all perfect. Poetry and nature can be the relief, the salve to life’s wounds. They save us. Thank you for the resonance of this wonderful write.
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Dear Annette, I appreciate your very encouraging and thoughtful review. Thank you so much for your v.. read moreDear Annette, I appreciate your very encouraging and thoughtful review. Thank you so much for your visit.
Ouch! I've been working on a short story Chris, similar(ish) to this, where when I am enjoying the views hear, I think I hear a voice in the wind and I can't tell you any more without a spoiler alert... 😊
It turns out she was my ancestral neighbour, born 200 years before my time and ever since toying with this idea, she has become like a guide to me from much harsher times than I now live.
Her name is now settled on Morag, after a brief flirtation with naming her Agnes, and hopefully it will have a stoner of an ending, which may at least compete with yours, but can't better. 😊
Dear Lorry, may that voice in the wind always guide you. I hope your story is soon ready to post. Ha.. read moreDear Lorry, may that voice in the wind always guide you. I hope your story is soon ready to post. Have a good Tuesday. All the best.
Chris
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Thank you... And I meant to type stunner of an ending, not stoner! 😊
1 Year Ago
Hee hee, I did think it might be a typo. I do them all the time :))
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..