Sounds like the kind of cold, wet, grey day that Britain is sometimes known for, the kind where it's best to stay inside and keep dry and curl up with a good book. I understand that monotonous scenery; it gets like that here in Bishkek through most of winter where almost everything is grey or white. Your use of repetition gives us a sense of that monotonous, almost boring view. Perfect weather for the swans, though. A poem jam packed with keen observations and images, Chris.
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Not holiday weather Makhabat. Plenty to see though through a window. Swans love the rain. Many thank.. read moreNot holiday weather Makhabat. Plenty to see though through a window. Swans love the rain. Many thank yous for stopping by to review.
An eternity of tides
slip on clean stones
awash in redundant rain
pouting people pave
silent fresh floors
grey in the bobbing sway
swimming in slime
drowning in the harbor.
Does that answer your question?
billigami
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Hello bill, I like your response here. A nice bit of brevity. Thank you for your visit. Strange how .. read moreHello bill, I like your response here. A nice bit of brevity. Thank you for your visit. Strange how the mind wanders when the muse shows up. Have a good day.
an intriguing question that only time and the tides will ultimately answer .. clearly an observation of the moment captured and locked in its very own poem :)
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Thank you Neville. Yes some quiet observation on a very wet morning on a recent holiday to Brixham. .. read moreThank you Neville. Yes some quiet observation on a very wet morning on a recent holiday to Brixham. Strange the thoughts that lead to a poem. Have s lovely day my friend even though I know it’s likely to be a busy one.
Sounds like the kind of cold, wet, grey day that Britain is sometimes known for, the kind where it's best to stay inside and keep dry and curl up with a good book. I understand that monotonous scenery; it gets like that here in Bishkek through most of winter where almost everything is grey or white. Your use of repetition gives us a sense of that monotonous, almost boring view. Perfect weather for the swans, though. A poem jam packed with keen observations and images, Chris.
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Not holiday weather Makhabat. Plenty to see though through a window. Swans love the rain. Many thank.. read moreNot holiday weather Makhabat. Plenty to see though through a window. Swans love the rain. Many thank yous for stopping by to review.
I love this Chris and have been reading it all day. I love the story and the images that come from your words. There are lots of ideas and feelings in your words.
I love the very descriptive lines;
'have licked cobbled stones clean ....'
' .... spilling from guttering on to pavement people.'
' .... swaying to the tune of grey misty days'
' .... lower walls drowning in salt sea history.'
Thoroughly enjoyed this piece Chris.
Richard
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Dear Richard, thrilled to hear you have read this poem several times. So pleased you enjoyed the rea.. read moreDear Richard, thrilled to hear you have read this poem several times. So pleased you enjoyed the read. Many thanks for sharing the parts you especially liked. Lovely to have a visit from you. Take care my friend. All the best.
A delicate yet lively description of the tides - nice imageries
I can imagine the scenes
Well done Chris!
L
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Thank you dear Louisa. Pleased you could visualise the scene. A special place for me. All good wishe.. read moreThank you dear Louisa. Pleased you could visualise the scene. A special place for me. All good wishes.
Thou hast penned a magnificently beautiful and most imagery descriptive piece of Poetry that I did find to be invigorating and inspiring to my humble heart and mind ...
Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham
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Dear Marvin, your visit and kind comments are very much appreciated. Have a good week-end.
<.. read moreDear Marvin, your visit and kind comments are very much appreciated. Have a good week-end.
What is it about a collection of water that fascinates me so much if it's a stream, a pond, a lake, a river, or an oceanfront I am endlessly fascinated by them? This reminds me of the thoughts I had when I died in the hospital I could not fathom how I was still there when I was not present anymore I remember having this thought (isn't that strange) I think you read that incubation poem I wrote but one of the lines was just that...
And I, in the absence of;
Savor, sensation,
scent, sight, and sound…
something remained…
Was it my displacement,
of the countless droplets
in the perpetual motion
of the water cycle?
Maybe that's what I was missing in that query perhaps like you just wrote maybe the answer is that water is the closest thing to physical evidence of the past that we experience in life?
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Dear Robert. Your response is so interesting to read. All I know is I have a real affinity to water... read moreDear Robert. Your response is so interesting to read. All I know is I have a real affinity to water. Whether river. stream, ocean or rainfall, it’s there. I hope dear friend your recovery is going well and you are getting your strength back. Take care. So pleased to have a visit from you.
Just being by the sea and smelling the salt in the air would wonderful. But the smell of fish is another thing, they work so hard to make ends meet. Struggling by the life of the sea is a very hard life. Nicely written Chris.
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Thank you Weeping willow . A poem written on a recent holiday to Brixham a small fishing town on the.. read moreThank you Weeping willow . A poem written on a recent holiday to Brixham a small fishing town on the west coast of England. It has an amazing history. Weather was very rainy but we had a good restful break. I appreciate your visit and your thoughts. Have a great day.
You bring the rain to life Chris with the monotony of it pelting down on rooftops. drains, roads, pebbles, boats... and the mist...always around until the sun burns it off... you portray the tides in and out and the slimy green moss when it is soaked..... "drowning in sea salt history" is a good description of the scene...
Well done my friend.
Best, B
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Thank you Betty. Our holiday was restful but rainy. Always something to look at here and the harbour.. read moreThank you Betty. Our holiday was restful but rainy. Always something to look at here and the harbour is a place where there is plenty of activity. Your thoughts are very much appreciated. All the best.
Chris
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You're welcome Chris; here too in April we get a lot of rain...some sun too like today!!!
Bes.. read moreYou're welcome Chris; here too in April we get a lot of rain...some sun too like today!!!
Best, B
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..