On The Marina Lake

a layer of ice
sees a swan stumble and skid
slip sliding away

Reviews

[Perdition]

Actually could go into so many aspects of this one as far as it lapping over into metaphor but I won't. The layers show even when the holiest of holies, those white-suited angels from every aspect of water, once they touch down onto the truth, well, even they must deal.
Brilliant and I would love so to expand but not going to...lol. Thanks!~

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Perdition. It was a first seeing a creature of such grace and elegance stumble. That thirty seconds covered many emotions including humour. Composure regained very swiftly. Our species has much to learn from the natural world.

[W. Barrett Munn]

no matter the nearer your destination the more you become a swan.

Paul Simon would approve.

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Winston. Yes it took a few moments for the swan to regain its regal composure. Thanks for noting my nod to Paul Simon. Have a good day.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

A perfect rendition of a humorous transition
You have given your horde of viewers two excellent posts to appreciate this morning

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Dave. A few moments of ungainly here. Usually so elegant and composed it was quite strange to see. All the best.

Chris

[Lorry]

Such graceful and majestic creatures, until they turn into Lee Evans as they try and fail to land. 😊

[Chris Shaw]

So right Lorry. The height of elegance
until ….. A few moments of ungainly. Yes usually so regal and composed and I like your Lee Evans example. Thanks for the smile.

Chris

[D. Mansfield]

Chris you amaze me with your range. You seem to have mastered it all, and yet you take the time to read so much of so many, helpoing us find our way. thank you for that

[Chris Shaw]

Many Thanks DM for calling on this haiku and for your kind comment. You are appreciated.
read moreMany Thanks DM for calling on this haiku and for your kind comment. You are appreciated.

Chris

[DIVYA]

A haiku with a beautiful visual and a message.
The ice I saw was so slippery and can be so hazardous for all, even for a nimble creature like a swan.
Your superb word choice, makes it a treat for the reader.
Loved this haiku!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you DIVYA. This poor elegant swan had a few moments of ungainly as it regained its composure. Not often you see a swan on ice. I appreciate your thoughts. Pleased you enjoyed this haiku.

Chris

[DIVYA]

It was so adorable to read!
Yes, my friend, even the most elegant have their clumsy moments.

You're most welcome. Have a beautiful morning!

[Chris Shaw]

And you too 💐