Transition

Transition

A Poem by Chris Shaw

echoes from the past
empty rooms weep in silence
a new broom sweeps clean

© 2022 Chris Shaw


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Kind of feels like this Senryu is related to your Rendezvous poem. You swept up the echos and found something more to write about in the pile of past. I wanted to attach the two since Senryu is about the foibles of mankind and they seemed relative to each other.

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Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Thanks Bill. The two poems were not linked in any way so I found your shared thoughts interesting. T.. read more



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A very relatable poem for me, here. An old neighbour died quietly yesterday, the hearse took him away and today morning, I noticed someone sweeping his yard clean. "a new broom sweeps clean", beautifully expressed dear Chris.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear DIVYA, pleased you could relate to this piece. Yes it gives feelings of sadness, but also confi.. read more
AYVID N

2 Years Ago

I always love reading your poetry ❤
I think this works so well due to the diction choices. empty/silence echo the vowel sound; new/broom/sweeps/clean
these slant rhymes contribute to the musicality. Even the “s” sounds of echoes/past contribute. excellent choices all around

Winston

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear Winston, thank you for your very encouraging review. Good to see you. Take care.

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Very interesting Chris and shows there is still plenty of life in the 5-7-5 format.
Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thanks Tony. I am really fond of the 5/7/5 format. Pleased you enjoyed this one.

Chri.. read more
Sometimes those echoes resound. The silence heard is only in the mind. Echoes are swept away by a hope-filled tomorrow
A very thoughtful write, Chris.

Take care - Dave

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you Dave. Quite a sad situation. I appreciate your visit.

Chris
Again, I ask, where is the like or heart button on this here site!? This is poetry that definitely rides the top of my range of pilgrimage. The past weeping the silence and the broom sweeping... the almost sterile emptiness of cleaning... the heart and mind dances and bounces to and fro in the reading. This is magnificent Chris !
Freds.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear Freds, thank you so much for your appreciation and visit. Have a good Sunday.

Ch.. read more
Sweeping the Cobwebs of yesterday where dust rose to higher realms of Enlightenment… we wonder why the clouds of doubt encompass our days. The Rays of Sunshine seem to bring Hope Eternal. Blessings of Colors in Amber Gold. tenderly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Many thanks Pat for your beautiful and poetic response. Have a happy Sunday. Sending love across the.. read more


Sadly, and ever so, this is an excellent example of one of my favourite poetic forms Chris.

Neville

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thank you Neville for stopping by. Yes, senryu and haiku, a favourite of mine too. Have a good Sunda.. read more
Few words that say so much, can feel them ;-}

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Your thoughts dear Weeping willow are appreciated. Many thank yous.

Chris
Sweeping is a lot like smoke from sage sticks for encouraging old energy to move on. And the rhythmic motion amplifies that intent. It becomes a meditative dance of soul cleansing.
Thank you for sharing this, Chris, it really resonates with me

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Dear Amy thank you for your share.Pleased this senryu resonates with you. All the best.

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A haunting little senryu with a clever ending. I live in an apartment complex and recently saw that a neighbor who lived in their place for years surprisingly moved out. I could only imagine the years of memories accumulated there in those rooms. And how fast it was cleaned out and ready to be rented within days. Nice piece Chris.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Years Ago

Thanks Carlos, it took less than four hours to remove all trace that my aunt had lived in that apart.. read more
Pauline

2 Years Ago

Sad to read Chris. (You're in my thoughts.) xx P.

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Chris Shaw
Chris Shaw

Berkshire, United Kingdom



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