swans apparently are happy in either salt or freshwater
autumnal sunlight finds
five mute swans sleeping soundly
on an inner harbour slipway
where salty sea water creeps
closer by the minute leaving
cobbled stones wet
long necks stretch as
heads and beaks hide within
their feathered white plumped up
soft on touch pillowed plumage
comfortable and by all accounts
completely soundproof
oblivious to any movement
or screams from screeching seagulls
overhead while their brown coated
young wait grounded and greedy
yet keeping a safe distance from
those in deep sleep
Reading the poem, I couldn't help thinking how trusting those swans are to be asleep so soundly out there with screeching seagulls overhead, the sea in constant upheaval and perhaps a noisy harbour.
Their sleep is sound and undisturbed regardles of their surroundings.
I wish I slept unruffled like that always....
As always, you take your reader with you to the scene, I fill myself with the beauty of those moments I glimpse through your words.
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1 Year Ago
Like you DIVYA I am envious of the swans who have the ability to sleep through the din of their surr.. read moreLike you DIVYA I am envious of the swans who have the ability to sleep through the din of their surroundings. Such beautiful creatures, full of grace. Thank you for your encouraging review. 🌺
Reading the poem, I couldn't help thinking how trusting those swans are to be asleep so soundly out there with screeching seagulls overhead, the sea in constant upheaval and perhaps a noisy harbour.
Their sleep is sound and undisturbed regardles of their surroundings.
I wish I slept unruffled like that always....
As always, you take your reader with you to the scene, I fill myself with the beauty of those moments I glimpse through your words.
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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Year Ago
Like you DIVYA I am envious of the swans who have the ability to sleep through the din of their surr.. read moreLike you DIVYA I am envious of the swans who have the ability to sleep through the din of their surroundings. Such beautiful creatures, full of grace. Thank you for your encouraging review. 🌺
Beautiful, graceful creatures.
Nice writing Chris, great imagery.
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1 Year Ago
Thank you Ciara. I do agree, they are beautiful creatures. Full of grace. I appreciate your thoughts.. read moreThank you Ciara. I do agree, they are beautiful creatures. Full of grace. I appreciate your thoughts.
Shades of WB Yeats' 'The Wild Swans At Coole' Chris. Beautiful birds certainly but very aloof. Birds have their own logic and intelligence I believe that humans can only guess at. Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️
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2 Years Ago
Many thanks Tony. Such beautiful creatures, so elegant and graceful. I love to watch them. Happy Sun.. read moreMany thanks Tony. Such beautiful creatures, so elegant and graceful. I love to watch them. Happy Sunday my friend. All the best.
You paint a picture as vivid as a photo m'dear.
Never knew swans would put up with brine, everyday a school day.
Another lovely poem :))
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2 Years Ago
I too was surprised to see them in saltwater. They were drinking the rain water that had settled in .. read moreI too was surprised to see them in saltwater. They were drinking the rain water that had settled in little boats though. Smart, as well as beautiful. Thanks Gee.
What a gloriously subdued painting of gentle sleeping swans - took me right to the water's edge.
Winston
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2 Years Ago
Dear Winston, I so appreciate your encouragement. Big thank yous for your thoughts and your visit.read moreDear Winston, I so appreciate your encouragement. Big thank yous for your thoughts and your visit.
Another beautifully described scene, Chris, with well rendered imagery and effective expression. Swans can be aggressive, evidently, but I always find them to be full of beauty and grace. They are very photogenic. A lovely poem!
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2 Years Ago
Thank you Robert. Yes they can get aggressive if they have their young with them. Best not to get to.. read moreThank you Robert. Yes they can get aggressive if they have their young with them. Best not to get too close. They are incredibly graceful creatures and I do love observing them.
They are such graceful animals and soothing to watch for me. I've often looked at them online just to relax.
Nice one, Chris. :)
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2 Years Ago
Thank you Tim. You are so right. They are relaxing to look at as they glide gracefully along. I love.. read moreThank you Tim. You are so right. They are relaxing to look at as they glide gracefully along. I love to observe them.
I just love swans and your poem paints an enchanting picture for me, all the way down to the young ones. Lifelong partners together on the water's surface, beautiful creatures., wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing
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Many thank yous willweb for your visit. Yes they are beautiful creatures for sure. Love to watch the.. read moreMany thank yous willweb for your visit. Yes they are beautiful creatures for sure. Love to watch them.
they are just beautiful creatures and this expression truly shows their beauty.
j.
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2 Years Ago
I love them so much J. Whether on the river or by the sea they are so majestic. They also remember p.. read moreI love them so much J. Whether on the river or by the sea they are so majestic. They also remember people, much in the same way an elephant doesn't forget. Yes, they thank you when you feed them. I thank you too, for your thoughts.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..