At the outset, let me compliment you on the stunning imagery in the following lines:
crows in rows
that resembled musical
notes upon a song sheet
of September gold
Reading this was so inspiring. A standard of writing we all aspire to.
The heart bleeds for these children taken so much before time. Indeed, such violence mars the beauty of all creation. There is something so rotten in the world for this to happen. It's so against the grain of Nature and all things beautiful.
A poem filled with such beauty and compassion!
Posted 1 Year Ago
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1 Year Ago
Another apology from me DIVYA. I don’t know what happened three weeks ago, but I appeared to have .. read moreAnother apology from me DIVYA. I don’t know what happened three weeks ago, but I appeared to have missed some of my reviews. I always treasure yours and send another apology. 💐❤️
1 Year Ago
Awww...No worries at all, dear Chris!
I know how much you care and I feel blessed to have you.. read moreAwww...No worries at all, dear Chris!
I know how much you care and I feel blessed to have you here. Thank you so much for appreciating my words always.
At the outset, let me compliment you on the stunning imagery in the following lines:
crows in rows
that resembled musical
notes upon a song sheet
of September gold
Reading this was so inspiring. A standard of writing we all aspire to.
The heart bleeds for these children taken so much before time. Indeed, such violence mars the beauty of all creation. There is something so rotten in the world for this to happen. It's so against the grain of Nature and all things beautiful.
A poem filled with such beauty and compassion!
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
1 Year Ago
Another apology from me DIVYA. I don’t know what happened three weeks ago, but I appeared to have .. read moreAnother apology from me DIVYA. I don’t know what happened three weeks ago, but I appeared to have missed some of my reviews. I always treasure yours and send another apology. 💐❤️
1 Year Ago
Awww...No worries at all, dear Chris!
I know how much you care and I feel blessed to have you.. read moreAwww...No worries at all, dear Chris!
I know how much you care and I feel blessed to have you here. Thank you so much for appreciating my words always.
Ouch. I need more bourbon to read this… yet we honor those lost to violence by remembering and even more by caring.
The poem ends on a sour tone too. I’m think it’s appropriate for the center circumstances as well.
I tend to try to resolve my emotions when I write and find some meaning it bright future… yet here, you show how powerful it is to let it bleed a little longer.
A powerful write.
Thank you for sharing,
Scott.
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1 Year Ago
Thank you Scott. Sadly violence is almost coming the norm. Not the way I grew up. Showing signs of m.. read moreThank you Scott. Sadly violence is almost coming the norm. Not the way I grew up. Showing signs of my years now. I appreciate your visits.
Your poem reads as though it came from the morning newspaper. What kind of world are we living in? Good writing my friend. ~Sharon
Posted 2 Years Ago
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1 Year Ago
Thank you dear Sharon and so sorry it has taken a week to respond to your thoughtful review. You are.. read moreThank you dear Sharon and so sorry it has taken a week to respond to your thoughtful review. You are appreciated.
Such wonderful discriptive writing that enables this reader to picture the scene and to imagine himself becoming a part of.
Thank you.
Rob Churchward
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Hello Rob, thank you so much for stopping by. Pleased to know that you enjoyed my efforts. All the b.. read moreHello Rob, thank you so much for stopping by. Pleased to know that you enjoyed my efforts. All the best.
Good morning dear Chris,
Oh gosh this is such a sad poem. I was moved by these lines "before long he will be
forgotten someone's much
loved son"
This is so very true...so sad and so true.
You really wrote the feelings of this young persons untimely death and the horror of it so very well.
Hugs, Lisa ...pouting rain since yesterday..much needed..
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2 Years Ago
Thank you dear Lisa. Yes, on our doorstep and so very sad. Awful to think of adolescents killing ado.. read moreThank you dear Lisa. Yes, on our doorstep and so very sad. Awful to think of adolescents killing adolescents, but that is not a one off any more. Knife crime in youngsters is on the increase. Hope all is good with you. So you have rain. Much needed. We have it too, and for once I say bring it on. It is much needed. All the best to you. Have a lovely day.
You are so welcome... I am off to play piano and be ready for my helper to work on finishing up orga.. read moreYou are so welcome... I am off to play piano and be ready for my helper to work on finishing up organising and cleaning the under built.... Already spent 10 hours in there this past week,
Lisa
2 Years Ago
Enjoy your piano and don't work too hard :)
2 Years Ago
Finished the underbid...100% and I am so happy with it... Day is ending so I am of to watch a movie .. read moreFinished the underbid...100% and I am so happy with it... Day is ending so I am of to watch a movie on Netflix with Bob
How many places will we all end up avoiding? I live in New Jersey, but it doesn't seem to matter. Every night on the news is more and more reports of senseless killings. We all seem to share this unbidden horror in New York, Colorado, California, Great Britain, and elsewhere. Surly it must end, I pray that it does.
Take care - Dave
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Dave, somehow I missed responding to your lovely review, even though I read it. So sorry. Apologies .. read moreDave, somehow I missed responding to your lovely review, even though I read it. So sorry. Apologies sent. Hope you and Millie are well.
It is sad the way of the world is now days.
It is sad to see it full of violence and anger.
we all need more kindness in the world.
Liked your write, it speaks
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2 Years Ago
Pleased you stopped by Kate. Many thanks for your thoughts.
dearest Chris… it seems that our World is mourning the loss of humanity… Our 💕 hearts are broken and we are helpless to change the Direction. There is always “Hope, Faith and Charity, but the greatest of these is 💗 Love”.
🙏 Amen, Pat
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
Dear Pat, what a terrible direction we are moving in. Such violence everywhere, even in places where.. read moreDear Pat, what a terrible direction we are moving in. Such violence everywhere, even in places where you wouldn't expect it. Peaceful countryside bordering residential areas where living standards are high. Sadly morals of some are in the gutter. So sad. Sending love across the waves on a beautiful Saturday afternoon.
Chris
2 Years Ago
Yes… for the Sake of the Children growing up… we will do our Best to keep them Safe from Harm. .. read moreYes… for the Sake of the Children growing up… we will do our Best to keep them Safe from Harm. We must not become so depressed… that we become mentally disabled. Prayer is Powerful… I believe that a Silent Prayer is felt by the Great and Holy Spirit. Amen… Pat
Again beautifully written, the first 8 lines my fav :))
Too much teen violence, what happened to a good old fashioned punch up to solve quarrels, most teens think they are gansta...pricks.
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2 Years Ago
Yes a punch up and a shake of hands and it was done. How times have changed Gee. So much needless de.. read moreYes a punch up and a shake of hands and it was done. How times have changed Gee. So much needless death these days. Thanks for stopping by.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..